For something more than love

"Make love not war"

 

For something more than love

by jack

 

Trenches dug, a mile deep

My body it is sore

Firm against the lies that seep

Beneath the sliding door

 

Crevices of mounting hate

Stand the borderline

Quietly I sit and wait

A distant church bell chimes

 

Thunder falls from every cloud

Children run and hide

Barricades inform the crowd

To walk the other side

 

Sticks and stones and broken bones

Phrases fired back

Insults from the words have grown

Now arming the attack

 

Strangers in the circus tent

Clowns to fill the car

Popcorn quotes, the need to vent

This now has gone too far

 

Raise the flag, your colored choice

Wave it high above

Think before you use your voice

For something more than love

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[BlackRose]

LOVE this! Well done. Rhymes so well too blending one after the next. Written as if it flowed effortlessly off of each pen stroke. And yes, we do need ALOT more of it (love).

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for your lovely comments. Love is the key.

[BlackRose]

Sure is. :o)

[Sri05]

This is really deep. In the conquest of something more than love. Beautiful. Loved it :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much. I do trully appreciate your kind words.

[Larkrise]

This is a beautiful poem.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much

[Ayvid N]

Just a great feeling I got reading this poem.

"Think before you use your voice
For something more than love" - So catchy, so good.

A great message, a n excellent poem.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for your kind words sweet Divya

[Ayvid N]

You are welcome Jack.

[Augusta]

It is not just about reading a poem, for me it is about feeling it. I felt the pain!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much

[Manvi Dev]

I loved the message in your poem, especially the end:
"Raise the flag, your colored choice
Wave it high above
Think before you use your voice
For something more than love"
That grabbed me and I thought it was amazing! But I do agree that we should think before we speak, because what we say could affect someone enough to break them.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much. yes indeed, you are correct.

[unsavable_soul]

Excellent conveyance, at least from my view point as the reader I felt the picture also truly set the mood. I honestly thought this poem was about out right war and particularly in reference to a level of personal experience...
But the idea shift through the center into a theme of vicious words and ideas, simply genius in it's execution. A very strong and positive meaning in the end leaving me to feel provoked to extend my voice in your chorus.
Magnificent and inspiring, truly.
Thank you so very much for your powerful message.
Appreciatively
Chris

[Jack...]

Thank you Chris, I appreciate your thoughful review

[Valentine]

True write and one that many of our loved ones have had to go through over the years..aznd for what? It seems we tear a country down to ashes and them put billions into rebuilding it..why...only to tear it down later on..I am sick of hearing all of the news of war and seeing those poor soldiers without arms and legs..love your neighbor as you love yourself..you have expredded this so wwell Jack..Kathie

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Kathie

[Tate Morgan]

My this took me straight into the trenches of world war 1 and the horror of what they once lived. Amazing isn't it that children run to war for duty honor and excitement then learn the horrors are way worse than they could have imagined. So well done I thought you akin folk to Hemingway. But we all know this look back is really a look at the ugliness of human nature today as well as then. The difference back then was men were men and when they fought they faced off one on one. They didn't hide their identity behind a faceless avatar. Their is something so cowardly in that .

[Jack...]

Thank you so much

[Terohime]

I absolutely love how you used the trenches from the world war. I love the poem, keep up the great work.
~Your friend Res

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much