Forever Winter Lingers

The cold reality of a lost love

Forever Winter Lingers

by jack

 

 

Forever winter lingers

Breezes fuel the cold

Altering our state of mind

Spring is put on hold

Days of endless wonder

What may lie ahead

Fill our thoughts with questions

Where this way hath led

 

Sent from outer regions

Called to line the past

Wishing is so fruitless

As our dreams are cast

Time does light the moment

Shadows of the sun

Clouded streets of nowhere turn

Found encased in one

 

Losing what we thought we had

Standing in the rain

Painful as the torrents go

Memories remain

Locked away till needed

Smiles may produce

Laughter hides in open view

Happiness reduced

 

Love was once a pillar

Yes indeed it stood

Built on trust and honesty

All we saw as good

Slowly it eroded

Caught between the lines

Miles stood between us

Pointed to the signs

 

Strength it should have kept us

Held our heads above

Powerful its wisdom

If this be truly love

I always thought we’d be

Standing hand in hand

Facing what might greet us

What life might demand

 

Now broken by the roadside

Energy depleted

What was once so wonderful

To never be completed

Forever winter lingers

Here inside my heart

Springtime laughs at me indeed

Never more to start

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[PP]

This is an awesomely sad and meaningful love poem, loved reading this Jack:)

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for stopping by and reading my work. I truly appreciate your kind words.

[PP]

My pleasure :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Reading this sadness my heart Jack... how truly devastating to be broken in this way. If only the seasons could bring you back together...(sigh)~

"Now broken by the roadside

Energy depleted

What was once so wonderful

To never be completed

Forever winter lingers

Here inside my heart

Springtime laughs at me indeed

Never more to start"~ Beautifully written!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for your sweet words Robbie.

[Distant horizons]

A wonderful title that sums up completely the feelings and emotions of not to be.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much.

[Augustus]

This is a very soulful write. "Breezes fuel the cold" is an extremely creative line. We know of wood to fuel fire, but you speak of the absence of heat being fueled. That's unique! You have laced your poem with some good metaphors and the photograph at the beginning sets the right mood. The titular line "Forever winter lingers", seems rather innocuous, but upon reflection, I feel it is the most powerful and evocative line in the poem. It truly brings the reader face to face with the absolute and eternal triumph of winter and infuses sadness in the heart.
On a critical note, I think the poem is a tad too lengthy. You do enough to keep the reader interested the whole time, but I do believe that it would create a stronger impact in a more condensed form. A good write nonetheless.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much. I will take your suggestion into consideration.

[Augustus]

You're welcome! :)

[David Scott]

I think this can be true for some. We give the power or the resposability of our happiness to anouther. It feels like "forever winter", but if we stop moving our soul into the cold, Spring will find us...
Sorry... I just felt that response. I was not trying to counter the feeling of the poetry. You expressed the loss very well! This is jsut what it feels like. Empty nothingness forever and ever. Beyond life and death. I get it and I have been here.
A great write as I have come to expect from you Jack!

[Jack...]

Thank you so much sir and please, do not apologize for what you feel, that is the intent when I write. I want to spark something in the reader and your first comments are exactly correct, even if it seems like a large mountain to climb at times.

[Sami Khalil]

"As our dreams are cast

Time does light the moment

Shadows of the sun

Clouded streets of nowhere turn

Found encased in one."
You are a genuine poet Jack for every time I read your writes it inspires me and touches on cords hidden ... Never you write anything that is boring or cliche for every one is unique and magical... A breath of fresh air and a light breeze.
Lovely metaphors all over this piece...:)

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much friend, I appreciate you stopping by and reading and leaving such kind comments.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome dear poet...:)