Shadows hung

The world is darkest when you find it impossible to forgive yourself

Shadows hung

by jack

 

 

Desperate on this darkest star

In stagnant air to breathe

Jagged reach of tended far

So much I can’t believe

 

A’ chained upon the barricade

Locked this welded form

Broken of mistakes I’ve made

Waiting on the storm

 

As here upon my knees I weep

Head within my hands

Crying tears forever keep

Aside from promised plans

 

My heart now sliced in silent view

The end beckons me home

This which I have done to you

My life it sits alone

 

Shadows hung on shouldered fall

Mud encrusts my feet

Pain besets this lonely call

As endless sorrows seep

 

“I’m sorry”, echoes in my head

Engulfed in rhythm’d flow

Offered of a broken man

Who prays for you to know

 

Pleadings from this sectioned seat

I beg with all I am

Calling out in sad repeat

This empty place I stand

 

I ask for your forgiveness

Myself I can’t forgive

This punishment lies endless

Of fractured days I live

 

The pain is ever coming

Though nothing I shall share

I face the sun so stunning

In hopes that you are there

 

But still the time is passing

Sand in glass does fall

Desolate amassing

And I deserve it all

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[AYVID N]

There's such pain, dismay and loneliness here, it hits you right across. And the guilt that come with the suffering...

Very well worded, very beautifully written Jack.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much

[eglantine]

This is most certainly a darker piece of yours--displays the shadows we all contain behind sunny dispositions. Leads to a nice conclusion/realization/acceptance of the speaker.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much E.

[Emerald Seas]

This reads of such sorrow and pain. I read such a thread in your writings and I bite my tongue with the questions that pop to mind. I'll try to keep my reviews to the writings and not delve into the subject matter - it could just be an old writing you've decided to share... and the point is long past the expiration date of action.
You write with heart and an exquisite style, Jack. Of that there is no doubt. You draw your reader to the moment and the deep feelings being expressed.

[Jack...]

We all have ups and downs Dear Sera. I am not immune to these things, but I do manage to get over things pretty quickly. I write what I feel at the time i write it. This one is a bit older, but not that much. Hell, I am a Cancer, we are supposed to be moody people. Thank you so much for your sweet and kind words. It is always a thrill when your name pops up on my screen.

[Emerald Seas]

Hmm... Cancer peeps, I'll have to look that up as I'm not as familiar with the sign. Now, I'm a Virgo... 'nough said, huh? lol...
You're welcome - I always enjoy reading your work :)

[Veronica Chandler]

This write seeps deep into my pain spot...welcomed like a treasured and well known friend. I recognize this haunting chant and sung it countless times, though never with the poignant, haunting beauty as this poem has. I find it so much easier to release the culpability of others who have done some harms to me, than it is to forgive myself. I find it so strange that I would never hold anyone to as high a standards as I do myself. No one could be more critical of me than I am of myself. This one pierced my heart like a sword, so I suspect this piece speaks to the kind of feeling I know too well. Very well done sir!

[Jack...]

Veronica, as always, your kind words about my poetry thrill me to no end. Thank you so much.

[Baby Ricochet]

Yep. Forgiving one's self can be some chore. Thanks for posting this one Jack. I related to it well.

[Jack...]

Thank you for reading it and commenting sir.

[Valentine]

Wow, you tore out my heart on this write..you are growing more each write..I really liked the 3rd ..4th and last groupings..terrific write.,.Valentine

[Jack...]

Thank you for your kind words.

[Lily Mae]

You have a special gift Jack. You take our hearts and souls on a journey with all you write. I felt as though you pulled my heart out of my chest and had a little chat with it.. carefully returning it at the end..xo

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Lily Mae. Happy to see you stop by

[shallimarRose]

Stunning Rhyme.. Heartbreaking theme... your gift is outstanding.. sR

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much

[Frieda P]

I could barely get through this one Jack, my heart started to bleed...can't say much more.....

[Jack...]

Thanks Frieda. I truly do appreciate you.

[Frieda P]

Sorry Jack, it hits home...