What does it matter

Babies shot in strollers??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????

 

 

 

 

What does it matter

by jack

 

Shrugging my shoulders

Drenched, constant rain

What does it matter

Stones against pain

Arms ever folded

Taking a breath

Reading the column

A headline spells death

Font bold and bearing

Counting the names

All of the only

Spelled but the same

 

Cold is this railing

Deep of the form

Clinging for life

The midst of the storm

Hurried intentions

Rushed, never still

Dreaming of nothing

Endless the chill

Carving initials

Titles unknown

Pleading with nature

Leave me alone

 

Hands in my pockets

Counting the change

Drowning in life

Torrential the rain

Drops bound of leather

Strapped to the brace

Bolted positions

I come to trace

If I do matter

Then why am I here

Facing the forecast

Coated in fear

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

Babies shot in strollers...I seem to recall something about that. No need to refresh my memory, I probably blocked it for a reason...

Very solid piece, Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks Kimmer, it was a heat of the moment piece.

[KAOlmsted]

Sometimes those are the ones we are most proud of. Always my pleasure, Jack.

[RobbedByGreed]

Makes me think of so many things... I am not sure of your exact meaning! You've really got me thinking. This really does tug at the heart and mind.

There is so much in this poem, I am astounded. Simple yet complex. A perfect mix of words, really.

Well done!


---RbG

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for your kind words.

[Baby Ricochet]

Wow. This is really good. Difficult and painful for sure

[Jack...]

Thanks so much

[quinfinn]

profoundly metaphorical and gripping with polished emotion. this is straight from the heart. a resonant piece, superb writing!

[Jack...]

Thanks my friend

[Blue Ivory]

A powerful poem with words that pierce through the mind with meaning.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much

[Salar Majak]

(Drowning in life
Torrential the rain
Drops bound of leather
Strapped to the brace
Bolted positions
I come to trace
If I do matter
Then why am I here
Facing the forecast
Coated in fear)

the numbness takes over, the fear, chilling!!!
scary, this is by far most the best poem i've read today,
but it hurts.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Aurora. I appreciate you taking the time from your studies to read my work.

[Salar Majak]

:), NEVER say that!!! it is an honor to me to be able to read such profound works!!

[icelandicblue]

Jack this is just fabulous. It captures the cloying feeling that can permeate life when we are in despair. You use great imagery like chills and drowning that are highly effective. This is one of the best I have read on the subject. You are quite versatile in your subject matter and that is why I always like to stop by and read your work.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much. I appreciate your kind words.

[Androglossia]

I like the flow of this. Very smooth and self-generated.

[Jack...]

Thank so much

[Frieda P]

Jack this is an amazing read, it really speaks to so much to how many of us feel, sad write from you, which pains me. Your poetry is usually joyous and makes me feel light, this one definitely is a downer and I can feel the weight of it.

[Jack...]

Thanks Frieda, the headlines are surely depressing

[Frieda P]

No doubt about that Jack, but your poetry always helps me to rise above that feeling of dread...my pleasure.

[Emerald Seas]

Been asking these same type of questions all week. So many losses, tragedies. I am spent emotionally - bleeding out in a way.

[Jack...]

Nice to see you back Sera. Thank you for reading and commenting.