Mountain paradise

The cool waters, the rushing waterfall and two lovers enjoying each other

 

 

Mountain Paradise

By Jack Ivey

 

 

Cascading down the mountainside

The crystal waters free

Flowing forth to quench this thirst

So deep inside of me

 

In perfect stance I hear the rush

A shimmer faithful glow

To hear the splash of all that’s good

Now falling down below

 

So white of foam and ripples pure

I wade in splendor mist

In natures wondrous bounty true

This peaceful daylight tryst

 

The waters cool upon my skin

A midday sun does shine

In shadows cast of dancing limbs

Of daydreams I do climb

 

Naked in this hidden place

Among the shining stone

I hear the mountain waters rush

And feel I’m not alone

 

The faintest whisper calls to me

My name I soon do hear

As now the girl with golden hair

Before my eyes appears

 

With nothing but a robe of white

She smiles tenderly

One foot she places in the pond

My waiting eyes do see

 

Her robe now lying on the ground

The beauty of her skin

Her silhouette against the sun

I beckon her come in

 

She loves the feel the water brings

It starts her mind a flow

Out here among the vibrant green

In natures perfect show

 

In silent swim without a sound

Upon the surface glide

Until she finds her way to me

Now right here by my side

 

Her lips so full and red like wine

A hint of amethyst

I stare her deeply in the eyes

And then a tender kiss

 

My arms they reach to hold her tight

So close I need her near

To feel the beating of her heart

Within the waters clear

 

So quietly we listen to

The sounds the forest brings

Flowing winds and waterfalls

And birds about who sing

 

Here in our mountain paradise

With skies so clear above

We share these moments that we live

Within each other's love

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Abhishekizy]

Its Great Jack, you are one of the most wonderful writers I have come across here. Your writes gives a joy!! I ain't sure if the girl was a metaphor of figment of imagination, but it syncs so well with the nature's pure description and that lends a majestie touch to your write as always. I am your big fan

[InsanityWriter]

Beautiful! Amazing imagery. :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is like a meditation to me.. all the senses alive in your paradise. Beautiful and romantic.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Lori

[Kristin Lee]

Wow, what a great day dream! I love the imagery in this one. There is something about water and trysts that's just...great. Classy interlude with a dreamlike quality wrapped up in superb imagery.

[Jack...]

My friend, I always appreciate your kind words.

[Cassie]

A.M.S I keep asking him the same question, How do you jungle letters and bring them together to make so beautiful words??

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend

[redflutterby]

Another beautiful romantic piece Jack.... how do you do it?
;-)

[Jack...]

I don't know. I guess I am just a romantic guy. :) Thank you so much my friend.

[redflutterby]

I'd say you've earned that title Jack!! Lol...

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Very descriptive and written with heart, well done, good read.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Thomas

[Astro]

Great stuff Jack. This one is the type of poetry I think people fall madly in love with. Beautiful use of imagery and setting to display your romantic talent. There is one line I picked up on though that could use a small tweak, if I may, "She smiles tenderly" would benefit from the word 'so' between "smiles" and "tenderly" to keep the rhyming perfect. That is all though, this is really great.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Astro. I'll check that out

[Astro]

Cheers, keep up the great stuff.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

So very well done...the idea of a "mountain paradise" that is only for lovers who share intimate moments with the world on the outside. You always inspire with imagery and anticipation of romantic love. Sensual, sublime...loved it.

[Jack...]

Sarah, happy you enjoyed this and smiling from ear to ear because of your review

[LapseOfMind]

Very well written, as usual. keep up the good work man

[Jack...]

Thanks so much