Time in a Bottle

Ticking, ticking, ticking...

 

Time in a Bottle

By Jack Ivey

 

I turn the key within its chamber

The hinges cry a woeful squeak

Closed up tight for years uncounted

Moments that this attic keeps

 

Memories of days forgotten

Scattered on this wooden floor

As if time trapped in a bottle

Safely kept for evermore

 

Foraging through endless bounties

Dust it lays more than an inch

Dim, the incandescent light bulb

No one else has been here since

 

Now my mind it tends to wander

Dreaming of the good old days

Photographs breathe life now savored

Black and white their bold displays

 

I find a tear my eye now forming

Destined, I relive the cost

Draped of fabric worn and tattered

Faces of the friends I’ve lost

 

Is this it, my life collected

Answered questions now begin

Left for someone to discover

Soon to scatter on the wind

 

I turn the key within its chamber

The lock it moans an empty click

Count your blessings as they happen

Life it passes, oh so quick

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Lonesome Traveler]

And in the end we leave not even a scratch; makes you think what are really here for, is there any worth?
Poignant words, thank you for sharing. Got me listening to time in a Bottle by Jim Croce now! :)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much

[Dalia]

Count your blessings as they happen

Life it passes, oh so quick

Wisely said Mr.Jack, time is deceitful, we must treasure each breath.
Thanks for sharing this lovely piece.

[Jack...]

Thank you for commenting

[Georgia Gypsy]

A interesting image, a theme always on our mortal mind. Perfect descriptions of the passing of time.
Apologies, i didn't intend to write a review in rhyme...it happens that way some times.

Enjoy this work very much!
GG

[Jack...]

Thank you for your poetic review.

[Hayley]

I sense a theme in you, a time of memories, reflections, and reminders. I like the concept of this poem- it's like time in a vacuum, or rather, the memories themselves. That's just my take.
Excellent writing!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much. I appreciate your kind words.

[Yasmin]

This poem is incredibly beautiful!
The idea is wonderful the rhyme is perfect and readers can relate easily
I loved every part of it till the very end but my favorite part is:
"Memories of days forgotten
Scattered on this wooden floor
As if time trapped in a bottle
Safely kept for evermore"
Well done

[Jack...]

Thank you so much

[daydreamer]

This was very amazing to read, it gave me goosebumps.

[Jack...]

Thanks you so much. I am happy it touched you.

[quinfinn]

i could actually smell the dust and hear the floorboards creaking as i tiptoed through the attic room...wonderfully shared, all these familiarities. a superb write!

[Jack...]

Thanks you so much

[quinfinn]

welcome, poet!

[Marie]

"If I could put time in a bottle..." I'd find your poem...

[Jack...]

Thanks Marie.

[Holly Mason]

enjoyed thank you

[Jack...]

Thanks you so much

[WingsToFly]

Amazing write

[Jack...]

Thank you so much