The Void

Nothing is everyting that it seems

The Void

 

Darkness finds my world this day

Sorrow forms the tear

Loneliness of empty dreams

As all light disappears

 

Craggy cliffs of memories

Drenched of pains bequeathed

Above me lies the shadowed ridge

Of long forgot belief

 

Silence rings its anguished bell

A resonating lull

Thoughts of sadness fill my mind

Of which I can’t control

 

Hollow as all time relates

Exhaustion now deployed

As my life does once again

Collapse within the void

 

And like a shadow calling

With fingered waving pose

I realize that this loneliness

Is full in my control

 

For as I stare off wearily

Abandoned on the shelf

I find it’s just a frame of mind

I’ve placed upon myself

 

For if indeed this is a void

Then nothing would exist

Days would go uncounted

Even after all is missed

 

When now in my illusions

A’ wander on this trail

The void is my solution

I’m certain not to fail

 

When if this sorrowed feeling

The torment and the pain

Is tossed into the dark abyss

Then nothing shall remain

 

And I shall breathe a sorted

Sigh of disbelief

To learn that in this nothingness

I find my true relief

 

So take this of my being

This sadness now deployed

To disappear before my eyes

Into the darkened void

 

Author's Note

always empty, always dark

Reviews

[s y e]

Exactly, nothing is at it seems, I've learnt that lately. I don't want to go and give you a big sob story but this touched me.

[Jack...]

Thank you my friend, happy you are enjoying these...I hope this one touched you in a good way.

[Astro]

A great sort of reasoning I'd bet. If we can all realize that this is possible there might be far more smiles decorating the human face. Well done Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks Astro. I always appreciate your visits.

[ANTO]

The logic you applied in this poem to expel the dark void is exemplary - its like a prescription - a homeopathic cure for the black dog Jack. Its shamanic, is what it is.
Well done Jack!

[Jack...]

Wow that is the first "shamantic" for me. Thanks so much my friend.

[ANTO]

Rofl - shamantic - oh you !! ;)

[TL Boehm]

this reminds me of a poem I wrote (not as good as this) back in the 80's. Don't know if I have it here or not. Yup, it is here. Its called State of Mind. I'll RR you. Like I said, its not of this caliber. Dark is not your usual palette, Jack but when you do it it is palpable.

[Jack...]

Tammy, I read State of Mind before I read this review. You have got to be kidding me. Your poem blows this one away. Thank you though for your sweet comments.

[TL Boehm]

you are biased. But that's ok! You made my day.

[MsJewel]

Your words are dark Jack, but there is light here as well and I can feel it as I read your words.
..and I shall breathe a sorted sigh of disbelief to learn that in this nothingness I find my true relief - wise words here. Sometimes we need this silence - this nothingness - to heal.
A wonderfully written poem Jack. You have an amazing talent.

:) Julie

[Jack...]

Thank you Julie. Indeed, solitude is needed every now and then. I appreciate your very kind words to me.

[Angel]

Sometimes we trip over a pebble in the way, and behave as if it were a boulder...
As this piece seems to contradict itself. Leave the sadness in the void...and come out, into the daylight.
And smile for your Angel!

[Jack...]

Yes it does, it is really one big contradiction, but the mind moves in so many different directions when faced with something like this, that there is no telling what it might think. You are my sunshine Angel and I always smile because of you.

[Angel]

You are very much loved around here, my Sweet Prince...not the least by your Princess...

[Rita L. Sev]

A void that finds the darkness of ink to be its only refuge...

Silence rings its anguished bell
A resonating lull...

Amazing sensory imagery here - I am lost in the depth of the silence...

[Jack...]

Shhhhh Rita, you're making too much noise. :) Thank you my friend. Thank you for always brightening my day with your sweet words.

[Natersby]

I don't read much poetry, but I really enjoyed this. It seems there is a battle between hope and despair. I especially like the line "I realize that this loneliness/ Is full in my control," contrasting "Thoughts of sadness fill my mind/ Of which I can’t control."

[Jack...]

Thanks so much for choosing to read mine. I think this entire piece is contradictive in so many ways, but I just started writing and went with how it came to me. I believe that this state of mind (that the poem portrays) bends the way people think and often they contradict themselves. Thanks so much again.

[Lydia Shutter]

Sometimes we need to escape into the nothingness....to feel numb for a while. Your words are dark, yet the flawless rhyme and jazzy rhythm of your words leads me to believe this darkness will not last long. We do talk ourselves into feeling depressed sometimes....and there are days when that's okay. If you are having a pity party though, make sure you have plenty of gin, ice cream, and other "staples" available. Very well written poetry, Jack. Lydi**

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Lydi...no pity party here (though some might argue that). And don't worry, I am always well stocked.

[Sami Khalil]

You are so talented Jack and no pun intended even in the dark genre. You will never be collapsed from our hearts and minds. Purge and pen on my friend...:)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Sami. I appreciate you always leaving such kind words for me.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)