What should I believe on

what would you believe in when your beloved only has betrayed you....

What should I believe on 

tell me please o...

I admired your sweetness

your heart was so clean I believed

that let me desire

you made me aspire

You were so innocent I thought

like perished by god's hands

you were so omnipresent and now also

to me in my heart and every land

But you broke me

I never thought you could do this

in that sweetness lurked

there lied the black heart

that black heart of yours

left me in perplexity

petrifying me so terribly

nothing but only chaos is left

the mutual understanding or whatever we had

I cant understand where it went

you pretend to be beauty queen

but I would say you are rather a flattered dream

you behave to be more supreme

far far from that you are a lost stream

I don't know what to believe on

I can't even imagine it could happen

and so well I pray for your being still

hoping to find you back as you were.....

Reviews

[J.V. Stanley]

Its amazing the shift some people can make, they put on a facade to gain the affection that they desire. Once they are in the midst of the reality of it, they sometimes balk-change their mind or simply morph back into what they originally were: too tired, lazy, or comfortable within the relationship to maintain that facade. I honestly don't think people go around intentionally breaking hearts-I think it's more along the lines that they don't realize that they do it. Then again, I'm the type that tries to maintain that faith in humanity-especially regarding matters of the heart.

This poem is more of a rationalization within the mind, the narrator contemplating the idea that the individual to whom is referenced was not quite what she had at first seemed. Although the underlying tone of the poem is that of anger and anguish over the loss-there is that last little remnant of hope that is clearly expressed that she could find her way back to what she used to be.

Some people don't realize that although we grow and change-sometimes taking a few steps back to find where we left off will ultimately lead us to where we were supposed to go in the first place-but we simply got side-tracked. Most times we need to find our way back on our own...other times-we need to be gently nudged in that direction. Some people ignore those proddings and move ahead...others realize their misdirection and backtrack.

Nicely penned, my dear.

[Manpreet]

A delicate and lovely poem!

[Dove]

You're angry at someone and you regret being angry, Im correct right? Anyway this is a fabulous poem.

[Barbie]

Ouch... That would suck... Great poem, I love the way that you wrote it... And all of the expressivness and feeling that was put into it... Great poem

[Shy Girl]

Your anger toward that person is evident. But it's the regret you seem to feel for that anger, is what caught me. You want them to be as they were, obviously, but YOU regret that they aren't. Regret THEY can't see what THEY have done. You regret, that is something...to convey that so quickly. Bravo! :) This is a powerful piece. (if I read it wrong I'm sorry) But still packed with emotion and yes...very powerful words. :)

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Wow, so emotional so well expressed. Love it

[Rhea]

touching tragic poem... :)

[Dahlia Phoenix]

"you pretend to be beauty queen
but I would say you are rather a flattered dream
you behave to be more supreme
far far from that you are a lost stream..."

People have always tried to be something they can never be. We never see that side when we are in love but when we meet it, its the most horrible mistake one can take for it leads to heartbreak and more.

This is well written and emotional. Good job.

[EMMIE]

GREAT WRITE. VERY EMOTIONAL, GREAT SUBJECT, WELL EXPRESSED.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

If someone is truly remorseful for their actions, the relationship can be repaired... won't be 100% , but it can grow to be stronger... You have conveyed a strong emotion of betrayal in this piece... Nicely done!