Dream

Slow motion film being watched by my mind,

Five minute reel happens in five hours of mine life;

Shadows of all unexpected things,

with the havoc and fears of unrealistic strings;

Complete set of imagination that no one can think of,

All that could happen which i want of;

Sci-Fi to mystic its all realistic,

i wish that i can light up the unlit;

When i woke up my mind was shattered,

If it was the dream my mind conquered;

I tried to remember what i was dreaming,

but it was naiive as pictures were fluctuating;

Hence, it's hard to remember easy to forget,

about what story has been previously set;

It was the first time i ever saw a dream in my life,

i sought if it were the things i was wanting to be mine,

or if it was the chemical unbalance of my mind;

All i was wanting now to dream once again,

as the journey was beautiful and relieved all my pain.

Reviews

[Misty_Prophet]

I see a lot of potential in these lines. It's honest, but it needs something to be vivid. Just don't know what... Maybe, if you could describe what you felt while dreaming, give us a glimpse of your dream, cause it must have been a good one when you said you wanna dream again. (Of course you would leave: I tried to remember what was I dreaming, cause then it would make reality.) You had a dream, you tell us which one, describe it a little, tell us how you felt, how you don't want it to stop, and then say you forgot it. But you still wanna go back to it. That's exactly how it happens in reality, and many people would connect to it, therefore, more people would like it. This is my honest review, and I wanna continue reading your stuff, cause you are quite good with words. I still think this is a good poem :)