The Righter

This is my current work. I've uploaded the first chunk and feel it is at least a little coherent. As i continue with the plot i'll more than likely double back and add several sub plot items.

I'd like an overall opinion on the first chapter as a whole, as well as comments on punctuation, dialogue and dialogue formatting. Also, i'm not sure if i should work on being more descriptive, i tend to get carried away with description so I've shied away from it a little here and it seems a little spartan compared to my other attempts.

I know everyone has their own process so i'm just working on finding my own. Honestly, any constructive criticism is much appreciated.