Crayons

Crayons

Fruity-pebbled breath
Exhaled on Alien tongue
Forms the Yin and Yang.
Their smoke travels on the waves
Crashing through the channels
Of my eager brain.
They whisper of Universe's plan
And give me Van Gogh vision.

I see the world melting -
Crayons left to weather
The cruelty of the sun.
Skies are swirling -
Tie-dyed orange blushes
Melding with a violet midnight
Punctuated by a dripping
Blob of cream.

My garden is
A pot of gold -
Place of tranquility;
Beauty draining from the canvas;
Muddied rose turned daffodil
In puddles of wintergreen;
Rainbowed polka dots
Where flowers did once bloom.

The sun is casting dominance
And the metal world
Bends at the waist
To bow its head
In reverent understanding.
Unbreakable beams
Now cascading -
Smoggy, silver waterfalls.

Reviews

[Rogie-Dodge]

lots of imagery and clever turns of phrase. I don't really get what message the poem is trying to convey. Perhaps in that lack of a definite message is an analogy for the bright colours crayon scrawlings of a child's free expression. The colourful imagery is thrown onto the poem like paint onto a jackson pollock abstract. So in that sense it is more like an abstract work of art in words than a 'poem' (whatever a poem is)

[Laur]

this was so visual, brought me back to childhood. loved it

[R. L. Hill]

Thank you ^_^

[Ruth]

Glorious, I always enjoy your writing, so much...there is always so many different interpretations to be absorbed and felt, this is perfect! x

[R. L. Hill]

Thanks, dear. Wonderful compliments ^__^

[Blue]

So creatively vague and wonderfully worded. I tend to be literal in my poems so poets with your style amazes me.

[R. L. Hill]

Thank you, hun.

[nike butenco]

so deep ))) vitality and industry

[R. L. Hill]

Exactly...thank you :D

[MsJewel]

Your use of metaphors is brilliant my friend. Keep coloring outside the lines!

Hugs, Julie

[R. L. Hill]

Thank you, doll!

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

I really like how you go into the plethora of fates that can befall crayons. The image provided definitely enhanced the theme of the poem

[R. L. Hill]

Thank you!

[ferousfinite]

Twisted and tantalizing indeed! I almost couldn't believe what I was reading as I was reading this. I really love the photo.

[R. L. Hill]

Hehe thank you ^_^

[Raymond Federle]

Multi-colored and dark all at once... When you tell something you always tell it well...to quote Van Gogh who said..."I'm sorry could you speak up. I'm having a little trouble hearing you."... Your voice, even were in whispers speaks volumes my friend.

[R. L. Hill]

Thank you, dearest ^___^ That's a wonderful compliment

[Baby Ricochet]

I didn't know coloring could be that difficult. I have a hard enough time just keeping the crayons inside the lines.

[R. L. Hill]

Haha! Why try to keep them inside at all??