Before And After

A Poem by coma black☯

I didn't notice you.

I didn't notice you at all actually.

I just walked through the halls, pretending

everything was fine, and I didn't notice

the way you cared about me.

When you asked me how I was,

I just shrugged it off.

When you told me I looked pretty,

I just laughed.

No one else cared as much as you did.

And I laughed at you.

I laughed at you my whole life.

I can't believe I laughed at you for trying

to be my friend.

Months past,

and you soon gave up.

You became a laughing stalk.

You became a freak.

You became a loser.

You became all of things I was

a while ago.

© 2011 coma black☯

Author's Note

It's kind of rough and choppy but yeah :P

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Coyote Poetry

Sometime we can play the demon in another life. Hard to open doors to friendship. Few people show their real faces. The poem had a sad ending. The description was strong making the poem come to life. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago

Roe	that was good i like the ending Posted 13 Years Ago that was good i like the ending Rating /100

newyearnorma

i liked this alot, reminds all of us about how we treat others

Posted 13 Years Ago

Enjoyed this write, especially for it's situation switch by the end of the poem.
It seems to be a high school story of someone who ignored the advances of an interesting person whom she later regretted, but it's kinda a cruel outlook towards the end with the reason she regrets she never accepted or gave in to the advances is because the person who was flirting is now someone of low social standards compared to what he once was. :/ woah, kinda wicked dude... :p put anywho, it's pretty good poetry I must say... yes, it does seem a bit choppy in places, but if you admit to that then there's no reason for constructive criticism.
Overall, I give this a 90/100... pretty great work I say.