You!

A poem for those obsessedly inlove that werent loved back. x

You, you, you!
Why couldn't you just love me as I do?
Lovin' you is the best that I can do,
Though you're not feelin'n the same way too.

Wishing you're always here,
For you to feel how much I fear,
Without you here, without you near,
It could just take my smile to tear.

You, you and you, you're my only hope,
My inspiration to go through and cope.
You're the only reason of my ecstatic smiles,
That let me dream and fly on skies.

Author's Note

Just deal with my poem. x

Reviews

[KAin]

Hey,
nice work, great rhyming. Unrequited love, the age-old story... But
there's an exuberance to this poem, a lively energy. It puts to mind
that despite the pain of love unreturned, there's a revelry to the
sensation of loving, all the same. Keep writing!

[Ronie Singson]

Thankyouuu ;) Share please. x

[Sami Khalil]

Powerful work...Thank you for sharing...:).........................

[Ronie Singson]

Thanks for the review ;) x

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)....................

[Amanda J Hopwood]

It speaks of the desperation part of love. High school love. Love is being able to live without someone, but not wanting too. Your poem also speaks of losing your identity to love. That is my take. I like the poem and it brings that feeling through.

[Ronie Singson]

Thank you. Hope youll share it ;) x

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Hey, good work! I like the risk taking, go getter attitude that this poem emulates. Rock on!

[Ronie Singson]

Thank you. I cant make it without inspiration xx

[Chris]

This is a strong write. You did bring the obsessed point-of-view to the front. Love is not obsession and obsession is NOT love. We do NOT own a person and must recognize love is unconditional and not always returned.

[Ronie Singson]

Thank you for that. Hope you liked it and youll share it ;) x

[Dhaye]

Nice expression of your love, Kabayan. Hope to read more of your works soon. Get in touch with other Kabayans here. Please join the KABAYAN ATIN ITO GROUP.

Happy writing!

[Ronie Singson]

Sure kabayan and may you help me on spreading this poem;) x

[ZackOfBridge]

I'm glad that you linked me to your piece. I liked the energy and flow of this poem.

[Ronie Singson]

Wow! Thankyouuu :)
Help me share and spread this please x hihi.

[zainul]

Nice efforts.
Keep up the good work.

[Ronie Singson]

Thank you ;) Can you help me spread this? Pleaseee x

[zainul]

You are welcome.
I am surprised to see the link of your poem in 9 comments of my poem.

[Ronie Singson]

Hihi. Sorry for that. I just want to have a lot of friends here cause Im just new.

[zainul]

You have to follow the rules.
You post more poems and stories.
You will get lots of friends.

[Ronie Singson]

Aa. Okay, ill try to make more. x

[zainul]

Thanks a lot,Ronie.:)