Can we fall in love online?

He doesn't know how I actually am crazy about him

It's so weird yet exciting to imagine him as curiosity is killing me

Seems as though there has been a connection since forever.

Dying to finally come alive and set sparks.

Why do I actually like him so much?

Even though we haven't been talking much

Is that meant to be?

Feelings slowly taking over and soon it will destroy me

Am I just waiting for something that will never happen?

Many people have told me it's worthless

Yet I keep the faith

His looks get looked down as average

But I feel he is the one and only.

Certain moments I will never forget.

Those that made my heart tingle

I hate how everything I say and feel so cliche

But I don't know how to put it in a better way

Your eyes and smile put me in a different world

But I am already living in a dream world

Is this all waste of time?

I really need something to set the sparks.

Even tiniest things light up my world.

My instinct tells me there is a chance

And I don't want to lose those feelings

I am never going to get sick of those love songs

It's like every song makes me think of you

I don't know what comes over me

I stay up so late in the hope of speaking to you

I have never paid so much attention to my looks

But now I have started using makeup

It's all because I just want to impress you

Sometimes I think it's not worth it

Afterall, it is just my imagination and obsession

But then again thoughts of you makes my heart beat faster

Sat there like a loser with love songs

Looking at your pics and drifting off to sweet thoughts

I am sure I am just as pathetic as the rest, sad as ever

There is something clinging to me

Which won't let me lose your sight or remembering you.

Reviews

[Norbanus]

Each stanza sings of luscious love's design
lays out with clarity the hopeful clues
until evolving, fluid and benign,
into a song of silent, fulsome blues.

When digging from within to find what's real
The only goal's to catch a moments joy
from restrained terms the wordsmith might repeal
When grasping 'round to find another ploy.

A lover, upon hearing words of cheer,
may have no notion why his mood's so grand.
He'll feel the joy and know you hold him dear
and rise to the occasion at your hand?

A poets strength brings forth, for all it's worth
confusion underlying first love's birth.

[49k_jdys]

I really liked this. Isn't it something how when you meet someone online, you build them up in your head and create a character of them that is destined to be crushed upon meeting?

[barleygirl]

This is a realistic depiction of how it might be for those who are falling in love online all over the world. It's a common phenomenon, so I'm sure your questioning is going thru millions of minds right this minute. It feels foolish at times becuz there's nobody to hold or touch. You've conveyed this idea well & the feelings of insecurity that go with it. For future writings, I would encourage you to try using more details (makes poems more unique & memorable) & not so many generalities (makes poems sound alike). Instead of saying: "The tiniest things light up my world" -- SHOW US THIS! Show me some examples of the little things he/she does . . . like the way I use (((HUGS))) is something unusual & hopefully sets me apart a little bit. Put such details into your poems & the messages come alive with imagery & relatability! Fondly, Margie

[R.E. Ray]

A fair question, which I believe you answered in your poem. YES! No relationship is a waste of time. We all take away something meaningful, even if it's a tough lesson. You captured well the magic and the naivety of online "love," though. How deep is it, for you and the other person. Yet, it's hope (conveyed in your last line), and that's good enough for now. Nice work!

[Mitchell Dean]

I like how you create this image of a one sided stalker obsession. I especially like how the female narrator puts this man she is obsessing over on a pedestal, and that you completely omit any of 'his' reactions to her obsession. Great imagery, great word choices. Love the second to last stanza, especially the last line

"Looking at your pics and drifting off to sweet thoughts"

[itsmenabs]

Thank you for your beautiful comments! :)

[Wonderland Asylum]

Beautifully written, I love your word choice, as well as how you structured this poem.
Just a suggestion. the 3rd to last stanza, 2nd to last line,
¨But now I have started using makeups¨
did you mean ´makeup´ or is the ´s´ supposed to be there?
Might wanna go back and fix that if its not.
Other than that very minor thing, this is a wonderful read, and I cant wait to read more of your work.
Send me a read request as soon as you publish anything new please!

[itsmenabs]

Thanks for ur comment, I have edited it to 'makeup'
and sure i will send u read request when i publish anything new. :)

[Nora]

I can relate to this peom so much 😂😂💔 , actually I felt like if that was me who wrote it .
Great job !

[itsmenabs]

thanks dear!

[Nora]

My pleasure :)

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Another interesting theme. Your words are very clear and precise. Your message is clear and strong. Your details of poem looks very real. Itself poem looks very strong.

[itsmenabs]

Thanks for the comment :)

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You very welcome.

[Rashi Jain]

Oh goodness. That was so relatable and so beautifully written.✍
'I don't know what comes over me
I stay up so late in the hope of speaking to you'
It's so true ❤
Such a graceful Writer.
Keep writing Friend ♥☯

[itsmenabs]

Thanks friend! I write what i feel, may be that's why it seems relatable to most of us

[Rashi Jain]

Absolutely. ♥