hiaku 1 (wonderland roses) hiaku 2 (erosion)

hiaku 1 (wonderland roses) hiaku 2 (erosion)

A Poem by itsjustme
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my first attemt at a haiku poem... Not so good... But its a two for one sale...my second attempt much more serious lol

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woonderland roses

roses are painted red

but they are really white

wonderland is odd

 

erosion

where does sand come from?

seashells grinding together.

time does this to all

© 2010 itsjustme


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Nice job with #2 Erosion. You have captured the concept with imagery and concise language. Your subject matter fits nicely within the form. Well done. #LRWP2018

Posted 6 Years Ago


Nice first attempt at haiku style poems! Interesting.

Posted 14 Years Ago


The second haiku is my favorite of the two, both are quite clever though! Nice work!

- S.T.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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my life as a poet started when i was a freshman in high school. there was this girl that i was going out with and i decided hey, girls like poetry ill write some. at first i rote only about her and .. more..

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