Surrender

Surrender

A Poem by Miele1228
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This song is kind of a mash up of my 2 favorite songs at the moment with a little twist added(: One day too late & Never surrender- (Both by 'Skillet')

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Those times in life 
When your best seems not enough
When your try harder than you should
And it’s all screwed up
When you can’t feel like this tomorrow
Nor can you live in today
When you wish you could turn the minute hand back
And change those hurtful things you say
To those all around
When you hear that tick tock sound
The minute hand cannot be rewound
So much to be done
And needed to say
Don’t let that moment slip past
‘Cause tomorrow may be to late
To take back those things you said
And when all this happens
You mustn’t fill with tears and dread
You must remember
To never surrender

© 2011 Miele1228


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Idk about it being a song, it definitely is absent of a refrain, chorus, bridge, or other variants otherthan a single verse (possibly a type of free-verse, more closely to spokenword).
I did enjoy it though, not trying to be harsh if I come off as such. I'm with the circus nerd though, compared to your other stuff, it is an improvement and a congratulations is in order for that, so applauds to you mate, applauds to you. I hope to read more. love the meaning behind, to never give up even when times go tough, ya that's sum stuff mate. keep up the good work, research sum other poetry types to try (shadowpoetryDOTcom is a good place to start, or wikipedia) and work from there.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This was a really great poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


We use to do this when I was a teenager (circa 50's & 60's) with popular songs to construct what we called "raps" (not the hip hop rap). Generally, they were composed for girl friends. I enjoy this. Why do you italicize and underline? The words don't need that kind of help.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Idk about it being a song, it definitely is absent of a refrain, chorus, bridge, or other variants otherthan a single verse (possibly a type of free-verse, more closely to spokenword).
I did enjoy it though, not trying to be harsh if I come off as such. I'm with the circus nerd though, compared to your other stuff, it is an improvement and a congratulations is in order for that, so applauds to you mate, applauds to you. I hope to read more. love the meaning behind, to never give up even when times go tough, ya that's sum stuff mate. keep up the good work, research sum other poetry types to try (shadowpoetryDOTcom is a good place to start, or wikipedia) and work from there.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow Shane, this is serious improvement on some of the last stuff I read. The passion is evident and stunning. Nice work, kiddo :)

Posted 13 Years Ago



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