Funny moments

He was  looking like he had a gun

-Rather a toy than the real one,

But smile on his face was saying something else.

He was on the mission to kill.

Universe, lack of empathy and look in his eyes

Wasn't enough to leave that 'place' or 'time'...

Reviews

[Vria P Crow]

I envisioned the narrator as an adolescent; a victim of bullying. Intelligent introverts tend to be a target because of their calm and quiet nature. The troubled teen appeared to be struggling with self esteem which lead to "dark" thoughts. Everyone has dark or hostile fantasies about doing harm to others; this was a natural thing. The "gun" was described as a "toy." Therefore, I inferred that the speaker was lost in that "place" or "time" while in a daydream; perhaps during class.

Overall, "Funny moments" was an intriguing read. I admire those who are not afraid of writing about "touchy" subjects.

Thank you for sharing!

[isus]

thanx, but it wasnt anything like that, i just made that poem for fun :) but anyway it's good you interpretate it on your own way :)

[andrew mitchell]

another reflective write for me on the world at crisis on what is and what may be. Is it a gun or is it? Is it a bomb or a hoax? Nice write.

[isus]

thanx a lot :) but i didnt really thinking of world events, rather some childish play

[forgotten_ghosts]

Very cool piece of writing. You should consider writting more parts of this, maybe a short story! Awesome!

[isus]

you really think so? thanx :))

[forgotten_ghosts]

Yes, of course, dude!

[Alice Poésy]

It's written in such a simplistic manner, yet I feel it's so profound. I liked it.

[isus]

glad you like it :)