Handful of arrows

In the midst of night dark

where Moon and stars leave no mark

we fight in fields of dreams and thoughts.

And when there is no more light

and everything is out of sight

we don't despair for we all know

The Sun will rise again and grow,

and uncast the Shadow deep

and where we stand there will be home

untill we fall asleep.

Reviews

[prymore]

nice job, it flows very smoothly.

[Norah]

Amen ! Right to the point !

[isus]

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[Nikki Monserrate]

This is beautifully written :)

[isus]

very very thanx :)

[Insight "MH"]

This is so smooth, the flow is magical and the thoughts are wise, I really enjoyed it a lot.

[isus]

hey, thank you very much :)

[Insight "MH"]

You are welcome ^_^

[andrew mitchell]

a nice poem but if you could eliminate a few too many "ands' even better the poem but I break all the rules!!

[isus]

i also noticed that but haven't figure out how to do it the way it stays 'unchanged'

[isus]

but i will eventually :D

[Jennifer Shaw]

This poem is warm like summer moonlight, yet it has somber undertones. I'd love to hear this put to music. Well done.

[isus]

actually there is music to it but not recorded.. my friend write music, i write lyric

[Jennifer Shaw]

Very nice.

[Kim]

I found this rather soothing actually, like a lullaby. The words fits together remarkably well :) I quite like it, good work!

[isus]

i'm glad you like it :)

[Foxemerald]

This has a deep resonation to it that I really like. It's simple, but speaks in tongues of length, heavy with meaning, weighed down by the most elaborate expressions . . . it's concise, but very meaningful. Nicely done.

[Foxemerald]

And, why don't you go to the moon? When you visit, please let me know . . . I was planning a trip myself.

[isus]

i will my dear.. but first i have to find out how

[Foxemerald]

There's no drawback to what you want- just focus on the object, and take it in steps!

[isus]

then tell me the path that my steps will have to go :)

[Foxemerald]

As soon as I have them documented!!

[Chris]

Had all the flavor of being a nomadic wanderer or refugee... to me.

[isus]

yes indeed, and as you say it i recall again part of our true nature

[Daydreamer]

I appreciate the simplicity of this piece. It is flawlessly sweet.

[isus]

thanx, it is actually with music, it would be great if i can show you