Stoned Alone

Take this!

I promise you,

it's the pill,

choice is yours

drink it

or spill,

I love you,

let me kill

you

Please, I'd love to ask you a question

I'd love to hear an answer

it's about particles and physics

and quantum mechanics,

maybe.

-but I love you,

I want to kill you,

because I can't;

you are light inside,

you are shining bright,

you can't see 'cause you are blind

star in brightless night

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

A most intriguing piece...it reminds me of a line I once heard: I'm so miserable without you, it's almost like you're here. This was kind of a dark one for me, which I have absolutely no problem with...I almost sense an undercurrent of jealousy here, but that may be a byproduct of my own interpretation. Whatever the case, this one truly made me think. Well done Isus.

[Saddam]

you are light inside,
you are shining bright,
you can't see 'cause you are blind
star in brightless night.

It is beautiful and fulof meaning.... Great one.

[Brook]

Unique. Good job, i like it. :)

[Mercy Fae]

Very interesting word choice and message. well done

[Rita L. Sev]

Intense piece here, Isus - well done!

[~Beautiful Dreamer~]

love the way you placed the words. Keep writing! Its really good

[Rachelle]

You can never dampen the spirit of one who derives his/her strength from the core.

Luceat lux vestra!

[prachi prangya agasti]

befitting lines..... liked the way they are portrayed... loved this one.... :)

[Frontier]

Hey Isus, welcome back haven't seen you around lately.

This is my favorite part

-"but I love you,
I want to kill you,
because I can't;"

I feel it says a lot and sp simply. A profound truth. You are very talented at it.

:)

[isus]

yes, im not here a lot and i dont answer reviews at all cause im not home very much lately