Now

is it time for me to go

or is it time at all

what i want and what you want

give me sword,

yes i will dance

dance for fire

dance for rain

dance for meaning

dance for death,

i will dance in sea of knowledge

or i will sink in worst oblivion.

Reviews

[Irenic]

A poem that brushes out the painting of the feeling of being free.

I appreciate your writing style with great heart.

Thanks for sharing

[isus]

thanx for reading

[Irenic]

....................................:)

[barleygirl]

I really relate to many of the things you're saying here, but again, it doesn't feel like all the images & ideas blend together into a cohesive message. "What I want & what you want" feels like an incomplete thought. The next 6 lines are GREAT, could be a poem all by themselves.

[isus]

i think you are right here, you somehow told what i was thinking all the time but i never really articulate it for my self, there is work to do here

[barleygirl]

Love the ways "dance" is woven thru this message. I'd love to see this being a whole message that included this dance theme.

[Cathy Wattam]

I like the meaning here but am put off slightly by the grammar. Room for improvement I think.

[isus]

my grammar is rather weak

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Poetic, I love it. Thanks for sharing.

[isus]

glad you like it :)

[TL Boehm]

I will dance in a sea of knowledge or sink in oblivion - this is the human condition. Well penned

[Your Teaship]

It's a bit grammatically broken, but still an excellent piece! Very strong and cute & dry; to the point. It conveys a series of emotions it seems, and tells a story within itself. An excellent poem! :)

[Aayushi]

This one was really good and i enjoyed reading it...good work :)

[goldifada]

amazing work i've liked it so much specially "i will dance in sea of knowledge
or i will sink in worst oblivion." it's got such a strong meaning :)

[topsyturvy]

Wow that's deep. "I will dance in sea of knowledge, or I will sink in worst oblivion."

[forevermore1218]

it was really good i liked the last line the most i thought it was a good way to end a poem of uncertainty. very well done :)