Now

Now

A Poem by isus

is it time for me to go
or is it time at all
what i want and what you want
give me sword,
yes i will dance
dance for fire
dance for rain
dance for meaning
dance for death,
i will dance in sea of knowledge
or i will sink in worst oblivion.

© 2014 isus


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A poem that brushes out the painting of the feeling of being free.

I appreciate your writing style with great heart.

Thanks for sharing

Posted 8 Years Ago


isus

8 Years Ago

thanx for reading
Irenic

8 Years Ago

....................................:)
I really relate to many of the things you're saying here, but again, it doesn't feel like all the images & ideas blend together into a cohesive message. "What I want & what you want" feels like an incomplete thought. The next 6 lines are GREAT, could be a poem all by themselves.

Posted 8 Years Ago


isus

8 Years Ago

i think you are right here, you somehow told what i was thinking all the time but i never really art.. read more
barleygirl

8 Years Ago

Love the ways "dance" is woven thru this message. I'd love to see this being a whole message that in.. read more
I like the meaning here but am put off slightly by the grammar. Room for improvement I think.

Posted 8 Years Ago


isus

8 Years Ago

my grammar is rather weak
Poetic, I love it. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isus

8 Years Ago

glad you like it :)
I will dance in a sea of knowledge or sink in oblivion - this is the human condition. Well penned

Posted 10 Years Ago


It's a bit grammatically broken, but still an excellent piece! Very strong and cute & dry; to the point. It conveys a series of emotions it seems, and tells a story within itself. An excellent poem! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


This one was really good and i enjoyed reading it...good work :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


amazing work i've liked it so much specially "i will dance in sea of knowledge
or i will sink in worst oblivion." it's got such a strong meaning :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow that's deep. "I will dance in sea of knowledge, or I will sink in worst oblivion."

Posted 10 Years Ago


it was really good i liked the last line the most i thought it was a good way to end a poem of uncertainty. very well done :)

Posted 10 Years Ago



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brod na savi, Croatia



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