Through Trip (Street)

probably not final version.

Endless fun like endless sorrow

burning in the hollow ground,

leaving Sun for us to follow

till there is no other sound.

And do you even know for sound,

do you know that you can hear it?

Have you ever seen true color?

-Try to imagine new one,

try to find just one new color.

Out of time and out of mind

I don't really wanna bother

will I live or will i die

in flash of light, in stroke of thunder.

Reviews

[isus]

aw... refreshing..unique..different and I loved the way it commanded my own mind to fly away in other directions of thought and ponder.. Very good...indeed

[isus]

i love that you saw directions i want to show you :)

[MsJewel]

Quite a thought provoking poem. Very creative and well written.

:) Julie

[isus]

thanx very much Jewel :)

[FlatLineBeauty]

Beautiful thoughtful and creative xo winter

[isus]

thanx winter :=

[Brook]

I love the first stanza, it's beautiful.
The entire thing is just really well written, great job.

[isus]

glad you think so? :)

[AYVID N]

An interesting poem that made me sit up and look around me for something different in my usually mundane tracks. Thanks for sharing.

[isus]

thanx for reading :)

[AYVID N]

You are welcome isus. :)

[Inda]

Love the ending, really ties this whole piece together and i just love the idea of thunder i think. Great piece!

[isus]

glad you like it :)

[Kasey Miriam]

this poem flows in a very interesting way very well done

[isus]

thanx for reading Kasey

[Kasey Miriam]

You're welcome

[alduin]

I really really really like this poem. It's different, but that's okay. I love how it reads, the rhythm, just everything. You're a great writer and I want to continue to read your writings because they hold so much emotion and expression and I like them so much that I cannot emotionally, physically, or even explain through words how much I like this poem without saying "really" a lot. There's over a billion words in the English language and I can't describe how much I enjoy it.

[isus]

can't belive someone like my writings, but it's somehow nice. thank you alduin, really glad you like it :)

[Cory Barrett]

I'm lost on this one, maybe I am not ready as a reader. I know there is a lot of emotion here, I just don't know how to interpret it. Great write though

[isus]

maybe i'm lame writer :) anyway thanx on reading

[FlamingPhoenix]

Interesting delivery. The start is great and I'm loving where I think you're going in this piece.

[isus]

glad you like it :)