Through Trip (Street)

probably not final version.

Endless fun like endless sorrow

burning in the hollow ground,

leaving Sun for us to follow

till there is no other sound.

And do you even know for sound,

do you know that you can hear it?

Have you ever seen true color?

-Try to imagine new one,

try to find just one new color.

Out of time and out of mind

I don't really wanna bother

will I live or will i die

in flash of light, in stroke of thunder.

Reviews

[Luna Zerimar]

The first stanza is amazing.

KEEP WRITING.

Don't put yourself down so much.

You're a great writer, in my opinion.

[isus]

in my opinion Charles Baudelaire is great writer, but thank you on support

[Aethereal]

Your poem wakes my slumbering mind. We know how we react to sounds and colors, how they change our moods; all else is a mystery that Science tries to understand.

Have you ever seen true color?
Are there sounds you’re never heard?

[isus]

yes, i ask my self that sometimes

[A.N Hunter]

Fantastic poem I really enjoyed it ! My fave part has got to be "in flash of light, in stroke of thunder". I have to agree with L4rn13, there feels like something is missing but it's what makes the poem beautiful. Continue with the unique writing style !

[isus]

thank you Ace, glad you like it

[L4rn13]

I like this write but it feels like there is something missing from it, like it may have ended too soon, if you intended this then it works really well making the reader want more. Very nice.

[isus]

yes, it might not be final version, i don't know

[Coyote Poetry]

"will I live or will i die
in flash of light, in stroke of thunder."
Some questions are answered by living and change. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[isus]

thank you for reading it

[Saddam]

-Try to imagine new one,
try to find just one new color.

Sounds like a thunder of thoughts. Beautiful.

[isus]

and did you try to imagine new color?

[Saddam]

YES.... Every time and every day. I am a dreamer.

[isus]

and did you saw that color?

[Saddam]

STRANGE BUT YES.....

[isus]

thats awsome, maybe i'll see it also in my life

[Frontier]

Ughh I failed, I can't see new color! :(

But Yeah liking this poem, the concept of seeing sounds and hearing colors etc. Your writing is interesting!

[isus]

but im not talking about seeing sounds and hearing colors in this one :D

[Frontier]

since you said leaving Sun for us to follow, till there is no other sound, I just saw it that way.

[isus]

this is beauty of all my work, i love peoples interpretations of poems, i would probably never see it that way if you didn't tell me this

[Ren Grace]

There's so much in this world that we are unfamiliar with and I might be wrong with how I interpreted it but I thought this poem was a unique piece and it made me think twice about certain aspects of my mind. Beautifully written

[isus]

i think you can't interprete it wrong, you might not know what i was thinking about while writing it but you can interprete it anyway you want always, that is freedom :D

[daemok]

Wow powerful! there are so many ways to interpret this, it's so deep. it makes me feel like this world is fake and i want to break out of it. great job1

[isus]

well belive it or not, i wrote it in same atmosphere like you are lefted after reading

[daemok]

Cool! :D write more!

[isus]

i guess you affect me and i can write like this only because of you haha :D

[daemok]

I hope I can do that for everyone . Inspiration is only a small portion that makes a writer.

[isus]

i know, you can write always, but for me inspiration is boundary that separate all this s**t i write from some things i actually like

[daemok]

Ah okay. good luck! :D

[isus]

luck? :D

[icelandicblue]

I love the use of weather in this. It electrifies your words:

will I live or will i die
in flash of light, in stroke of thunder.

[isus]

what does it mean to you?

[icelandicblue]

It said to grab the world and see it anew because no day is like any other.

[isus]

does it stand still if there is no day, or your point of view of day?