For girl who stare

Day

faded away

and I,

two steps ahead

of the mind

in my head,

want you to be here,

in my mind, so you can hear

all this dreary talk;

But before you 

walk in nest

of thoughts and dreams

that never rests,

you should know

that you may find

yourself in there,

-but who would care?

Reviews

[Dark Rider]

I will admit that I am not good at reviewing poetry, but I will also say I liked this poem. It was easy enough for me to get your point behind it, and I liked how you portrayed it. Nice job. :)

[isus]

thanx on reading :) glad you like it

[Your Teaship]

This is such a simple but elegant write. I love the format and the way it reads in my mind is very clear, clean and cut precisely. Excellent use of vocabulary to go with the way the poem moves. :)

[isus]

glad you like it :)

[icelandicblue]

I love the term nest of thoughts and dreams. Here or there as long as we are where we belong.

[isus]

thanx blue

[kublakhan27]

This is something I deeply relate to Isus, especially the first part...a definite favourite of mine, and one for my library...awesome :)

[isus]

glad you like it :)

[Madalyn Beck]

I love the short and simple nature of this write, when in reality, it is a thought provoking piece. Beautifully penned, isus! (:

[isus]

thanx Madalyn :)

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Love this poem, is such a beautiful piece. Very interesting too. :-D

Kaze~

[isus]

you really think so?

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Yes I do. :-)

[MariaDahl1791]

Really good! I liked it. Keep up the good work

[isus]

thanx, i 'will' :)

[Leanna King]

Love it! Very thought provoking :D

[isus]

glad you like it :)

[A. Amos]

This is interesting and smart write, enjoyed the twist

[isus]

thanx thanx :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very well versed… if only loved ones could read each others minds they would understand what drives each other and what motivates unexplained actions.

[isus]

it would be nice