For girl who stare

Day

faded away

and I,

two steps ahead

of the mind

in my head,

want you to be here,

in my mind, so you can hear

all this dreary talk;

But before you 

walk in nest

of thoughts and dreams

that never rests,

you should know

that you may find

yourself in there,

-but who would care?

Reviews

[WillaDanvers]

This has a very smooth flow to it which is quite pleasing. The message is also very well portrayed, again another great read! :)

[isus]

thanx on reading :)

[Irenic]

But before you
walk in nest
of thoughts and dreams
that never rests,

you should know
that you may find
yourself in there,
-but who would care?

these lines are deep to effect. Very effective lines.

Thanks for sharing.

[isus]

thanx on reding :)

[Irenic]

......................................:)

[Trudi]

Ooooo - love this one. The reading rhythm is pleasing, and the words lovely.

[isus]

thanx :)

[Blossom]

I especially enjoyed '. . . before you walk in nest of thoughts and dreams that never rests'.

[isus]

thanx :)

[Tama]

I really like this piece! The pauses and articulation along with flow of your sentences really brings out the subject.

[isus]

thanx Tama

[Kahtia Howard]

I think you're becoming my most favored poet on this site. Just reading your little "about" area lets me know I can really connect to you and your poetry on so many levels. This has a beautiful flow to it

[isus]

thanx :)

[Karen]

The first stanza is superb. I love the idea (and my reality) of my mind being two steps ahead, with that special someone hidden within the confines of all that clutter.

[isus]

thanx :)

[Karen]

The first stanza is superb. I love the idea (and my reality) of my mind being two steps ahead, with that special someone hidden within the confines of all that clutter.

[Karen]

The first stanza is superb. I love the idea (and my reality) of my mind being two steps ahead, with that special someone hidden within the confines of all that clutter.