Correlated

by my friend Vinko and i

Yes! There is a lovely bud under my sweet, sweet pillow, colored as a greyest mud. -And runs ahead a raving beast, stoner-chasing armadillo, straight from the east. You know what I know, but some things I don't know you appear to know. Is punk in your eyes suddenly fading, are you a smiling pacifist now, punk shall be pervading, but peace should be there for all.

Reviews

[shaun7]

Nice flow. I liked the poem.

[isus]

i'm glad if you really do :)

[Irenic]

A very beautiful poem especially these lines:
Is punk in your eyes suddenly fading,
are you a smiling pacifist now,
punk shall be pervading,
but peace should be there for all.

thanks for sharing

[isus]

again, thank you for reading :)

[Irenic]

............................................:)

[Your Teaship]

Interesting piece. I was a little confused, but I supposed that adds to the mystery of the writing. Regardless, it's a very intriguing work of literature. :) Love it!

[topsyturvy]

You guys got spunk that's for sure. :) I like this: you know what I know, but some things I don't know, you appear to know.

[Aethereal]

I just loved this poem about Punk. It inspired me to write my own version of your poem which you may keep as your own as a gift.

Punk & Peace (Pumpkin Peace)

There’s a lovely bud
underneath my pillow
of the grayest mud;

Here there leaps a beast,
a stoned armadillo
chasing from the East.

Some things that you know,
not a status in quo,
are too weird to show.

Shall punk quickly fad
so peace may tend to grow,
or must punk pervade?

[isus]

hehhe thanx on your gift

[Aethereal]

You're welcome!

[isus]

Unique, strange... has a time flow to it or another world.. not sure which but it easily takes one's imagination off to another realm.

[isus]

glad it rides you away :)

[Shaquana Adams]

Is punk in your eyes suddenly fading,
are you a smiling pacifist now,

This was interesting to read. It's unique and almost witty :) Thanks for sharing.
-QuanaWana

[isus]

thank you for reading :)

[s y e]

Dude this is so unique and so cool... I loved the way it was written. Skills man, skills. ;)

[isus]

glad you like it but really, in creating this piece there was no skills what so ever haha we was very high that's all. but thank you anyway :)

[Rita L. Sev]

This one has a "hippie" feel to it; unique and kinda cool!

[isus]

it's a song of happiness :p

[Bluefire]

Twisted, yet it kind of makes sense to me. It's almost like a mixture between dream and reality.
Well played. ^^

[isus]

glad you like it :)