Story

In

low space in

lost meaning

curling

swirling

around my legs,

there are two

of them

right now,

try to notice

them riding

on the ice.

Reviews

[stars are far]

That was well done :)
keep it up

[isus]

thanx :)

[stars are far]

welcome dear :D

[kublakhan27]

Your words are succinct and your poetry cuts to the chase...I always find myself reading between your lines, as there seems to be much tucked away in there. Another poem that says its piece and promptly hands it over to the reader for further evaluation. I mentioned this in my last review, but you seem to have an acute understanding of the elements that comprise not only poetry, but good poetry. I enjoy your work very much...it challenges me, which is what good poetry should do. Great work again isus.

[isus]

a lots of kind words there, i'm really glad you think this is good, thank you on reading, there might be more :)

[Kleio13]

So short , but many meanings. This poem must be about the numerous and methodical ideas roaming around in your head over and over again and at the same time, you are numb. At least that`s what I can interpret.

and "there are two ot" should be "of" but I`m pretty sure you know that.

Other than that, great write. Short, but never simple are the ideas

[isus]

i didn't notice error, thanx very much for pointing it out :D

[Kleio13]

Your welcome :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Simple, effective and to the point, well done, good read.

[isus]

to the what point? :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Well there are any number of points one can take from this piece personally though it shows the very shaky grounds one walks in times of high emotion be it anger, love or intolerance perhaps.

[isus]

nicely said.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[Madalyn Beck]

I love how this is open for the readers imaginations. Short, simple, and beautifully penned. (:

[isus]

thanx Madalyn :)

[M.K. Jawdat]

wow, i liked this brief but creative piece. Nice

[isus]

very thanx :)

[Luna Zerimar]

"low space in..lost meaning". I liked that the best. Good job.

[isus]

thanx thanx :)

[Luna Zerimar]

You welcome. (:

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

WOW! Short and simple, but yet so beautiful. Nicely written.

Kaze~

[isus]

thanx Kaze :)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)

[RichGee]

Things that make you go hmmm???

[isus]

really? :)

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Well, Z, I can not exactly interpret this one with confidence... but it's abstract images have me wheeling in so many ideas. Your words are surreal and beautiful none the less. Good work dragi :)

[isus]

you can interpret it as you want, any interpretation is right, just read it and what you see that is it. many nice compliments draga, hvala :)