Story

In

low space in

lost meaning

curling

swirling

around my legs,

there are two

of them

right now,

try to notice

them riding

on the ice.

Reviews

[Brooke Graco]

With so few words you captured my imagination. As soon as curling and swirling were used, many things started 'swirling' through my head. Images with a lot of detail. Very surprising for me! This was fantastic!

[Irenic]

in a very hidden and imaginative way you have written a wonderful poem. Like it.

[isus]

im glad you enjoyed :)

[Irenic]

.......................................:)

[BlueZan]

For being a short poem, the images in my head were grand and excessive and widely varying. I very much enjoyed this and in fact read it several times to fully appreciate the different things it created in my mind. Wonderful.

[Aethereal]

This poem was amazing in how much information it expressed with so little: It inspired me to write this tiny gift poem for you to keep as your own:

Polliwogs

Somewhere in the fog
a scant outline
of two
spinning,
tumbling

each a polliwog,
a long, thin, fine,
dull view
grinning
crumbling.

[isus]

nice poem, thank you

[Frontier]

Another hit by Isus! bravo!

[isus]

hit? :p

[Ravyne Hawke]

and what a beautiful story this is... I love the ice skating around the legs

[isus]

hehhe thanx :)

[L4rn13]

Strange writing style and rather curious. Nice.

[isus]

well thanx :)

[Your Teaship]

This was actually a very different form of poetry to read. At least in my perspective, it was broken but not enough to hinder the reading process. It's lovely, and brings about a fair amount of imagery for a small piece! :) Enjoyable and unique.

[isus]

thanx :)

[Bowers]

creatively, written with a vast amount of imagery, I love it!

[isus]

thanx Bowers, glad you like it :)

[Inda]

This is just fantastic! Movement captured perfectly in words.

[isus]

hey glad you like it :)