Second

poem by my friend Keva and me.

Walls are strangling me,

sky has fallen,

doors are open.

It has a meaning, those words

As they were spoken

Were, simultaneously, written

In blood.

Chalice is empty

poison is spilled

on the floor.

It was a picture that spoke for itself.

Reviews

[Lune]

The picture that you've painted in your work is frankly beautiful. It describes life in the very estranged way that it is.

[ashish hajagulkar]

you have given the best personal thought of life

[isus]

well, it's multipersonal then :p

[Hannah Cheng]

This is powerful when you relate it to a personal event. Thank you for this, so many people can interpret it in different ways and that's what art is for.

[David E Navarro]

Well done, thanks for submitting to the Pride in Poetry contest. Since I will be judging this for the contest I will not write about it here (yet) nor rate it. Once the contest is over, I may drop by to leave a better review. Take care and keep on writing poetry.

[Irenic]

Tragic events takes only second to happen, this is what I can learn from it.

very nice poem,.

You are well versed poet.

thanks for sharing.

[isus]

thanx on your kind words

[Irenic]

.............................................:)

[andrew mitchell]

An enchanting tale like something from the Roman times, poison, the possible assassination, the chalice while the volcano erupts covering Pompeii.

[isus]

very nice interpretation :D thanx andrew

[Kaitlyn Raiford]

I love it. Maybe it is just me, but it kind of reminds me of Hamlet in a way.

[isus]

now you say it i can see connections, now it reminds me of Hamlet also

[Inda]

This is fantastic! It can be interperted in so many ways, i love it.

[isus]

i like this one also, thank you on reading :)

[Frontier]

I really like how you end it with "doors are open" it's sort of unexpected and only emphasizes how trapped one can feel. I also like the written in blood part, words, esp. from certain people are so powerful.

[isus]

oh, this is one piece that i can say i really like and i can understand your view of it. i think we have similar poetry and i wish you are here somewhere near so we can hang around, i think i would really love you

[Frontier]

:) You know, that thought also passed thru my mind, about the similarity in writing. Yeah I also feel I would enjoy your friendship, I am there in spirit! :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

Wonderful imagery.. this poem has multi-layers of meaning behind it... great job isus

[isus]

glad you like it :)