Second

Second

A Poem by isus
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poem by my friend Keva and me.

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Walls are strangling me,
sky has fallen,
doors are open.

It has a meaning, those words
As they were spoken
Were, simultaneously, written
In blood.

Chalice is empty
poison is spilled
on the floor.

It was a picture that spoke for itself.

© 2014 isus


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The picture that you've painted in your work is frankly beautiful. It describes life in the very estranged way that it is.

Posted 6 Months Ago


you have given the best personal thought of life

Posted 7 Years Ago


isus

7 Years Ago

well, it's multipersonal then :p
This is powerful when you relate it to a personal event. Thank you for this, so many people can interpret it in different ways and that's what art is for.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Well done, thanks for submitting to the Pride in Poetry contest. Since I will be judging this for the contest I will not write about it here (yet) nor rate it. Once the contest is over, I may drop by to leave a better review. Take care and keep on writing poetry.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Tragic events takes only second to happen, this is what I can learn from it.

very nice poem,.

You are well versed poet.

thanks for sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


isus

8 Years Ago

thanx on your kind words
Irenic

8 Years Ago

.............................................:)
An enchanting tale like something from the Roman times, poison, the possible assassination, the chalice while the volcano erupts covering Pompeii.

Posted 8 Years Ago


isus

8 Years Ago

very nice interpretation :D thanx andrew
I love it. Maybe it is just me, but it kind of reminds me of Hamlet in a way.

Posted 10 Years Ago


isus

10 Years Ago

now you say it i can see connections, now it reminds me of Hamlet also
This is fantastic! It can be interperted in so many ways, i love it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


isus

10 Years Ago

i like this one also, thank you on reading :)
I really like how you end it with "doors are open" it's sort of unexpected and only emphasizes how trapped one can feel. I also like the written in blood part, words, esp. from certain people are so powerful.

Posted 10 Years Ago


isus

10 Years Ago

oh, this is one piece that i can say i really like and i can understand your view of it. i think we .. read more
Frontier

10 Years Ago

:) You know, that thought also passed thru my mind, about the similarity in writing. Yeah I also fee.. read more
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Wonderful imagery.. this poem has multi-layers of meaning behind it... great job isus

Posted 10 Years Ago


isus

10 Years Ago

glad you like it :)

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brod na savi, Croatia



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