So Isus You have great heart and I see amazing potential. Don't take this as me being snooty because I have the same problem but try really hard to make sure you are spelling things right, or that the words are in the right tense. Other wise the reader can lose the focus of the actual meaning of your poem by the distraction of deciphering the words. Other wise I really enjoy reading your poems!
True till the day i die,
Lucy Girl
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
i was always lame at grammar, but i'm working on it :)
There you go with that beautiful poetic soul of yours... I love how you create such an atmosphere to your writing, filled with deep introspection. Another wonderful write, Z :D
Posted 10 Years Ago
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Hm, what I got from this? I read it a couple times over and basically saw the image of a man going through his day, then going to bed, then waking up again to do the same thing, but with a different attitude. He chooses a more positive attitude and finally opens his eyes to what life really could be, beautiful! You wrote that 'creation is flawless" and that it surely is! There is no limit to our creativity and what limits we should take it.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
nice interpretation, love it :)
10 Years Ago
Thanks, I kind of was afraid to say it since I thought it may have been too simple of one :/ But I'm.. read moreThanks, I kind of was afraid to say it since I thought it may have been too simple of one :/ But I'm glad you love it!
Wonderful poem, and I think a lot of people could relate to it. For me it has the feeling of not knowing which the right decision is, and wanting to do something rather than standing still.
Awake again in morning,
didn't slept last night,
despite expectations smoking 'nother joint,
days of losing mind in haze (have come).
This bit here feels like someone lost in life or stuck in a rut, or someone who's realised they haven't gotten where they expected to be. Like one of those days you wake up and think you'd like to do something new in life.
"From me to you" directly communicates with the reader as a letter of sorts. "Panoramic" suggests an omnipotent spectator. The speaker appears to be pondering about human nature over a joint. The third stanza made me chuckle because many can relate to "high" discussions. The ultimate questions commonly surface when weed is involved. I call it the "Artist's Food" since the plant stimulates creativity. The sleepless nights described in the poem gave me a sense of paranoia. At this stage, I imagine the writer was feeling uneasy with their thoughts into what could be a "bad hit." The third stanza describes the poet's strategy to calm them, and thereby, letting the flow of thoughts collect in a cohesive manner.
The core theme of "From me to you" presents itself in the last stanza: "Static is boring." The poet recognizes the beauty of every human being. We are split versions of "perception" which personifies the writer's reference to "New". We are creations yet we are creators. It is a wonderful contradiction.
Beautiful work, isus!
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
You do such deep and comprehensive reviews and i feel i dont deserve it in any way, if you ever read.. read moreYou do such deep and comprehensive reviews and i feel i dont deserve it in any way, if you ever read baudelaire or rimbaud you would know i really dont deserve it :)
10 Years Ago
Haha, I think you are too modest. We are all human beings including Baudelaire and Rimbaud. I beli.. read moreHaha, I think you are too modest. We are all human beings including Baudelaire and Rimbaud. I believe our thoughts often mirror successful artists; it keeps us connected.
Haha, I suppose the English major in me likes to dissect everything. :D Furthermore, I have simply come to enjoy your poetry as you well do deserve to be heard.