Out Of Nothing

green in the head

sun shining red,

all is for something,

just make it cool,

Red in the head,

glorious death

making up everything,

burning her tools.

Author's Note

would like to hear a good critique better then just saying 'its good' or 'good job...'

Reviews

[Quackin']

Really interesting! It seems to me that the first part refers to a sort of innocent enthusiasm for achieving something and the second part is about an apathy that gradually develops through frustration after achieving that something. Great job man, you've said so much with so little.

[isus]

it's great to read your comment because from your interpretation I see another meaning in poem and it's like totaly new poem to me :D always great to read different views, thank you :)

[Mercury Rising]

Powerful underlying meaning for sure. 'Green' is symbolic in this poem of creative power, the power to build on earth in a positive manner, but when 'red' is in the head, symbolising death, it becomes the destructive power and burns up the earth via pollution, etc.

This is what I was able to surmise, anyway. Is this what it means?

[isus]

your interpretation is not wrong because it is how you see it, it is similar for me also and i love to read all this different interpretations, with them i see different also. anyway, thanx for stoping by, thanx for reading :)

[RichGee]

I like this...the flow and rhythm is precise...
You did well with very few words...I need many more words to get my message across.
Very nice art.

[isus]

wow, you are far too kind, it is not that good at all, but thank you, glad you like it

[RichGee]

My pleasure

[Neville]

I like this too, congratulations on what is a very thought provoking little gem. All Good Things, Neville

[isus]

thanx on reading, glad you like it :)

[Neville]

my pleasure entirely

[BlueZan]

I like this and I like the length. It gets directly to the point but still creates a vivid image and emotion that the readers create for themselves. It makes you want more but the fact that you don't get more just adds to what you take away. Or what it takes away from you. I say very well done =)

[isus]

thanx for reading, glad you like it, now i might just keep it that way

[BlueZan]

Sometimes less is more and when evoking emotion without a reason why, the less information, the more it resonates. In my opinion.

[isus]

yes, i can agree with you 100%

[Rene Velez]

pretty good, wish it was a little longer, but , oh well, nice job.

[isus]

thanx :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Green means authorization, approval and permission. Red sun means danger or death. How come I smell an approval of death in here?
I don't know about the structure of this short free verse. What I feel is that I'm not comfortable with the commas especially at the end of the first verse (I prefer period for the end and no commas at the previous lines)
Thanks for the share.

[isus]

yeah, thanx for rewiew, i have to complete it anyway so you was helpfull

[Bri 810]

Did someone shoot them self in the head?

[isus]

i dont know, probably someone somewhere did

[Alene Parr]

So my interpretation is that green represents something new, fresh, etc. I see red as danger. After a few reads I'm getting that this is about making a mistake. I'm picturing a 15 year old girl or something like that. It did take me several rereadings to come up with that, which isn't a bad thing. I think if I read it a few more times I would come away with a different conclusion, which is really the great thing about poetry isn't it?

[isus]

it is maybe the greatest thing about poetry :D really like your interpretation :) thanx

[Diana]

Red seems dangerous. I wonder if there is any connection between the red sun in the first stanza and red in the second stanza...unsure.

[isus]

if you can connect it then you have a connection :) its all about interpretation