Floating down the sound resounds around the icy waters underground

Oh man, I'm red shifted,

and it feels ok,

but what's to do when light is gone,

and my legs are all stretched and long?

The light is gone

but just for me,

you can still see shimmers,

I'm beyond event horizon,

astroman and rivers.

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

Beyond the event horizon, red shifted, I would have liked to see this one go longer. It feels as though there is more to tell here. Very inftriguing.

[Erin DeLis]

Blackholes, right? No light and being stretched, but the event horizon part really tipped it off for me.

[isus]

yes my dear friend :) you are first who saw it as i wrote it

[Erin DeLis]

Woo! Accomplishment :P Haha, I watch a lot of shows about apace and want to be an astrophysicist so I sure hope I can identify black holes.

[FlatLineBeauty]

Very thought provoking. You still have me guessing. This one I will need to read a few times over. xo Winter

[Baby Ricochet]

Interesting but I don't have a clue

[icelandicblue]

Isus I want to understand but I am flummoxed and perplexed at this one. What ever is red shifted and who is the astroman?

[Tam Warink]

Isus, I fear that you are, perhaps, far too clever for the pen you wield in this piece. Words that come too close to the event horizon of our personal knowledge relegates them to inevitable deconstruction into pieces and chunks and points-of-reference that can be assimilated by individual reader's spheres of experience. The duality of the innuendo is not lost but it is cleverly cloaked between all points on the timeline; past, present and future. Of course there is the final interpretation that we, the readers, are permitted to choose. For that, I choose not the matter-compressed neuter surface oblivion but the equiexistent spewing forth; where spectral foment is reversed and your true self blazes forth into incandescent glory.

100 glimmering temporal shifts

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

FLOATING ALONG...
EXISTING IN TIME.

[isus]

:D :D

[Diana]

Yes, we must have our own personal light and fire...otherwise, uh oh.

[isus]

indeed :D

[eglantine]

Gotta say, wow! What a mouthful of a title! Very unique poem, reminds me of that isolated time one feels laying in bed late at night/early morning, unsure if part of the world or connected to the world are the same. Really like the last line as well as "red shifted."

Not sure if I care for the rhyming... Thank you for sharing.

[isus]

thanx for reading :D hope you like it

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. I like the thoughts and vision create by your words. I like the idea of floating away. Thank you for sharing the entertaining and fun poem to read.
Coyote

[isus]

thank you for reading :D