One man gone

The world of silent words

can tell me where to go

if I could only hear

pictures of their show.

Strange is way I looked

at one who I don't know,

one that's getting close

to the galows pole.

And he slowly turned my head,

showed me abyss of the dead -

path all mortals need to walk.

For the moment I felt free,

then I felt so terribly,

that my voice could never talk.

Author's Note

so, tell me what you think..

Reviews

[Michaela Spain]

numbing truth in concise words. I love

[isus]

one of my older works

[Annie]

The silence reminds me of those dreams where one cannot scream or yell no matter how much he opens his mouth or tries. That's how I felt when I read your poem. Good job!

[isus]

that's so cool, i love your interpretation :D i'm shure i couldn't do it better :D

[TL Boehm]

we are born alone and we die alone. there is both freedom and fear in facing the inevitable. Well penned

[isus]

thank you.

[Brittney]

I'm enjoying many of your works always ending so strong and wonderfully!

[isus]

man, it's so nice to know that. it's also hard to belive someone really find it good, thank you Brittney !! 11 ! glad you like it :D

[FlatLineBeauty]

I enjoyed this and the mystery you left that lingers in the back of my mind. xo Winter

[isus]

really glad you like it Winter

[Rita L. Sev]

There is a hidden back story here, quite compelling. Well crafted, Isus!

[isus]

thanx !!

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Wonderful write! Did awesome Isus:)

[isus]

Thank you Jonathan, glad you like it!

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Yes very much the gallows pole made me think of a song Robert Plant did, Your very welcome friend:)

[isus]

'Hangman, hangman, hold it a little while,
I Think I see my friends coming, Riding a many mile.' aaaaaaaa :D

[0000000000000000000000000000]

There ya go:) yeah that's rite ha ha!

[isus]

greatest band ever (after beatles :D )

[0000000000000000000000000000]

I agree 100 percent wish they get back in the game, Saw them live they were so awesome!

[isus]

oh i belive, i would die if i saw them, it probabbly would be too much :D but i was on the wall this year, saw roger waters :D

[0000000000000000000000000000]

It was fun 5 rows from stage:) Cool:)

[isus]

you lucker!!! :D

[0000000000000000000000000000]

I guess lol!

[icelandicblue]

i loved the poetry in this especially this verse:

And he slowly turned my head,
showed me abyss of the dead -
path all mortals need to walk.

I will admit I am a bit confused by those last two lines. ; )

[isus]

im glad you find it good, thank you :)

[LadyCardiac]

I get the impression that the death penalty is some where amongst these lines. For the moment I felt free,

then I felt so terribly,

that my voice could never talk.


Its that last verse that throws me off. However well written and I love how the words transcend you into the piece.

[isus]

thanks, i think we are all faceing deat penalty, its the way it suppose to be :)

[Alene Parr]

I might be wrong, but I'm getting that the protagonist is being murdered. Regardless of how accurate that interpretation might be, this is a great piece.

[isus]

he is going to die, that's for shure :) thank you very much, glad you like it