Enchanted lake of Outskirt

Why did we go so far,

why did we try so hard?

And laughing too much

devil gives us another look,

he dares us with touch,

such a lovely hook!

Instead of enlightening,

shining mock of brilliance

pouring on us something

that we can't define.

Reviews

[JordanStories]

Very good! I see nothing bad about this at all! Keep it up :)

[Rita L. Sev]

It is so easy to be fooled, and to stay in a place where we ought not be... Such a lovely hook indeed - but it can tear us apart... Well done, Isus!

[isus]

i love how you saw it, hook really can tear us apart, great revew indeed! thanx :D

[TL Boehm]

keep things simple - don't take things out of where and what they should be. that's what I carry away from this. There is an order and a balance to all things - to relationships - and when we move beyond what it should be to what we crave - there is confusion....
well penned

[isus]

interesting interpretation, love yor feedback. Thank you! :D

[MikeV]

Great write, this one really made me think
:)

[isus]

nice to know that :D thanx

[icelandicblue]

His purpose is to stay in the shadows. We don't define the whispering in our ear.

[isus]

well, we are all individuals, right? :D

[icelandicblue]

True, and we are all tempted at one time or another. It's what we do that differentiates us.

[isus]

well, i can agree to this 100%

[Frieda P]

Oh the temptation of it all, that's what keeps us reeling, do or die, it'll bring back some grand or not so hot memories, great one isus!

[isus]

thank you! glad to see all the interpretations :D very interesting indeed

[Angel]

Oh, he knows us all too well, that wily old devil! He knows just what lures to use to reel us in...different bait for different occasions. We humans are such fools!!

[isus]

yeah, you are completely right :D but, what can i say, we are just humans :D maded from atoms

[wordwarrior]

Oh bravo, this is stunning and your writing is exquisite. Ahh we can be lured in so many ways and the search for what is our own truth, persists.

[isus]

yeah :) thank you, i'm glad you like it.

[Mia]

No one can say temptation has never lured them in…the devil can be charming and we can be weak. Cool write!

[isus]

he must be charming :D or we would run from him. glad you like it :D

[Distantview123]

No-one is above temptation. Some people are weaker than others, for sure, but we all have to face temptation! Well penned.

[isus]

thank you :) glad you like it