Leave Me Broken

Can you see me past my stone hard eyes?

Or do you just see the anger on top.

Can you tell that the wall that I have built high,

Is there to protect me from you.

Have you realized yet that I have cried?

Did you know it was all over you?

Do you remember the scars that were on my skin?

It was done while thinking of you.

Do you know that when you talked about me

I would want you to say it to my face.

And that every whisper, and every lie

Would hurt me in so many ways.

You ripped down my walls and left me defenseless

Was all of this part of your game?

My admiration was given to you. 

But you hurt me all the same. 

Do you remember the days when we were once friends?

I guess it was too long ago.

Do you recall the time when we used to hold hands?

And skip down the tan and cracked lane?

I remember these times and the laughs that we shared

But tell me, why wont you?

I cherished these moments and the days that we spent

But now, you have left me broken.  

Reviews

[Lowesy]

:( this reminds me of me and someone. Well done...

Finally, a poem on here with punctuation. I liked it. One thing: Rhyming. Have you a couplets thing going on? Is it free verse? It seems chaotic, at the moment, which isn't necessarily a bad thing :) sometimes the chaotic form adds to the chaotic sense needed to convey meaning.

[Isabella]

Thank you for you input :) I've been wanting someone to tell me what I should work on!! Sorry for it being so chaotic. I didn't intend for that to happen :D it's just that when I write, I sort of make up my own rhythm that makes sense to me, but doesn't to other people... Anyway, thank you so much! I will try to fix this in the future! :)

[Lowesy]

you're very welcome, I hate it when people review but don't actually review :)

[Roque]

Thank you for the journey.