Worlds Of Wanderers

Words are worlds of wanderers;

Waning wishes, his or hers.

Time is but an apprentice

Learning lessons- Silence through noise.

 

Through my ringing ears I hear  

The nocturnal heralds of hazy peril,

Then with my weary withered eyes,

I see the oceans drowning skies.

 

I sauntered the deserts of scorching sands

With club and cryptic cubes in hands;

Skewered and shuddered the green less land,

Espying for eons to end an errand.

 

A realm through a portal I found,

Where once, deities and devils dwelt appeased;

Only to return with a broken might

When a shattered fairytale besieged my sight.

 

                    

 

                                                                                                                                                                                                            FETUS~

                                       11/02/12

Reviews

[Shadows of Memories]

Amazing format. and amazing thought process. through every word u give a vivid picture of exactly whats happening... my best lines are :
"I sauntered the deserts of scorching sands
With club and cryptic cubes in hands;
Skewered and shuddered the green less land,
Espying for eons to end an errand."

its obviously a very interstng write announcing strength and depth in it. I love the metaphor of the traveller u used. It has enhanced the underlying meaning so beautifully. Just can say its one of the best pieces tht i have come across :) keep sharing nd thnks

[Baby Ricochet]

Nice flow. Good work

[Constance Payne]

"Eons to end an errand"
this line speaks to me as I always seem to be trying to find time to do what it is that I need to get done so that I can move on to doing that which I desire.
Wonderfully Done.

[Holly Mason]

sauntering the desert with club in hand
so much imagery you have here
very nice
thank you for sharing

[Rebecca Dias]

Really nice poem! I simply love the words you used. Very deep thoughts.

[oh,hey.]

This poem is typically amazing, very thoughtful and full of meaning

[Trigorin]

Not bad, but check your spelling and grammar - 'travailing' should either be 'travelling' or, depending on what you intended it to mean, 'suffering' or something like that. As it stands it comes across as muddy and a little pretentious, which isn't a good combination. You have a good concept here, and although I do question some of your word choice, you've definitely gotten your point across. Well done.

[Zap-the-awesome]

Hm. That seemed pretty cool. I like it! Great work.

[Tate Morgan]

Your writing reminds me of craig froman another romantic such as yourself bravo

[Writer #00]

I have always marveled at those able to manufacture rhymes (and, in your case, wonderfully imaginative alliterations, as well) and still manage to convey an important message. I'll definitely have to re-read this multiple times until i can come even a bit close to what thoughts you had in mind while you wrote this. I can tell you write with a purpose and take your time like a sculptor painstakingly chiseling a wild piece of stone into the classic statues that ingrain themselves in the fibers of history. Great job, and thank you for sharing this poem with the world.

upward/100