Worlds Of Wanderers

Words are worlds of wanderers;

Waning wishes, his or hers.

Time is but an apprentice

Learning lessons- Silence through noise.

 

Through my ringing ears I hear  

The nocturnal heralds of hazy peril,

Then with my weary withered eyes,

I see the oceans drowning skies.

 

I sauntered the deserts of scorching sands

With club and cryptic cubes in hands;

Skewered and shuddered the green less land,

Espying for eons to end an errand.

 

A realm through a portal I found,

Where once, deities and devils dwelt appeased;

Only to return with a broken might

When a shattered fairytale besieged my sight.

 

                    

 

                                                                                                                                                                                                            FETUS~

                                       11/02/12

Reviews

[Shadows of Memories]

Amazing format. and amazing thought process. through every word u give a vivid picture of exactly whats happening... my best lines are :
"I sauntered the deserts of scorching sands
With club and cryptic cubes in hands;
Skewered and shuddered the green less land,
Espying for eons to end an errand."

its obviously a very interstng write announcing strength and depth in it. I love the metaphor of the traveller u used. It has enhanced the underlying meaning so beautifully. Just can say its one of the best pieces tht i have come across :) keep sharing nd thnks

[Allelujah]

THIS WAS AWESOME,ENJOYED IT.THIS INSPIRES,ME WRITE MORE.Great Ink

[Saddam]

You are from the heaven of earth and your poetry reflact it very well...
Nice poem...it is the world is world of amazing things.
Lovely poetry you have created dear friend...

[Daniel Dawes]

Really well written and an enjoyable read. Your use of words and expressions are compelling. Thanks for the write

[Donald Meikle]

You play well with my language sir.
I would substitute deities For dainties
and night for might, but then it is my native language.

[Irfan Bashir Shah]

deities sounds much better...

[Irfan Bashir Shah]

Thanks for the suggestion, mate.

[TheSearcher]

Wow. The style of test really fits the feel of it. Words of old are rare and meaningful. I like it.

[just_me]

Liked it. Very abstract and thought provoking. Keep writing.

[Rehan Roy]

Kya kahu yaar...an outstanding write!

[Rachelle]

Masterful alliteration. Pleasant to read silently and aloud.
Stranger from India, you have my respect!

[Blobert Coltrane Claus]

Close to flawless. Superb in every way. However, not sure how you want the "dainties" in the third last line to be perceived. Extremely impressed fella.

[Ayvid N]

Very well written. Thanks for sharing.