Worlds Of Wanderers

Words are worlds of wanderers;

Waning wishes, his or hers.

Time is but an apprentice

Learning lessons- Silence through noise.

 

Through my ringing ears I hear  

The nocturnal heralds of hazy peril,

Then with my weary withered eyes,

I see the oceans drowning skies.

 

I sauntered the deserts of scorching sands

With club and cryptic cubes in hands;

Skewered and shuddered the green less land,

Espying for eons to end an errand.

 

A realm through a portal I found,

Where once, deities and devils dwelt appeased;

Only to return with a broken might

When a shattered fairytale besieged my sight.

 

                    

 

                                                                                                                                                                                                            FETUS~

                                       11/02/12

Reviews

[Shadows of Memories]

Amazing format. and amazing thought process. through every word u give a vivid picture of exactly whats happening... my best lines are :
"I sauntered the deserts of scorching sands
With club and cryptic cubes in hands;
Skewered and shuddered the green less land,
Espying for eons to end an errand."

its obviously a very interstng write announcing strength and depth in it. I love the metaphor of the traveller u used. It has enhanced the underlying meaning so beautifully. Just can say its one of the best pieces tht i have come across :) keep sharing nd thnks

[Tate Morgan]

A shattered fairy tale in deed.When we lose our innocence we lose something precious.Hope and dreams

[Gabrielle Travis]

Incredible and impressive. I absolutely submerged myself into the imagery. Your voice has a tone of power and your mind a delightful fancy. Hats off to you! :)

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

Very much interesting, amazing thoughts. My best wishes.

[Thea]

Very impressive...The words you used really fitted each and every line in this poem...I also like how the idea goes on and on with the flow...
Well done...
:)))

[Archia]

Even though it took you awhile, I am so happy that you wrote it. It was wonderful truly; the description was beautiful, and the structure was amazing. I adore the first line, that in itself could be so much.

[Dayran]

Its great. It affirms what we may have experienced before and what it told us about life. But in going back to it we hope to learn a new lesson. Nice write!

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Your hard work bears delightful fruit. I am most impressed. I got a medieval feeling from this, like a traveler in ancient times.
Thanks for taking me there.

[Just Jayren]

Really well writteand clever imagry

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

It's obvious that you took some time on this piece and it shows! This is remarkable and I'm sure lingers on the mind of any poet. Nicely done.

~Anna Rose