Worlds Of Wanderers

Words are worlds of wanderers;

Waning wishes, his or hers.

Time is but an apprentice

Learning lessons- Silence through noise.

 

Through my ringing ears I hear  

The nocturnal heralds of hazy peril,

Then with my weary withered eyes,

I see the oceans drowning skies.

 

I sauntered the deserts of scorching sands

With club and cryptic cubes in hands;

Skewered and shuddered the green less land,

Espying for eons to end an errand.

 

A realm through a portal I found,

Where once, deities and devils dwelt appeased;

Only to return with a broken might

When a shattered fairytale besieged my sight.

 

                    

 

                                                                                                                                                                                                            FETUS~

                                       11/02/12

Reviews

[Shadows of Memories]

Amazing format. and amazing thought process. through every word u give a vivid picture of exactly whats happening... my best lines are :
"I sauntered the deserts of scorching sands
With club and cryptic cubes in hands;
Skewered and shuddered the green less land,
Espying for eons to end an errand."

its obviously a very interstng write announcing strength and depth in it. I love the metaphor of the traveller u used. It has enhanced the underlying meaning so beautifully. Just can say its one of the best pieces tht i have come across :) keep sharing nd thnks

[dunnia]

this is amazing i love it

[jazzkraft]

I love it!

[reflectingus]

This is such a beautiful masterpiece, and I could feel that hard work pay off as I read it, and read it out loud again. The alliteration and the number of words put together with great effort, just complimented a great rhythm, filled with emotion and beautiful verbosity, and an amazing connotation. I loved the way you accentuated that feeling of skepticism, and the proof, the way you explained how words are indeed worlds of wanderers. Every part of this poem-from the beginning to the end- had my utmost attention, and I'm honored that I read this unique piece. 100/100

[Michael of Gilead]

liked it, especially the alliterations

[The XYZ Writer]

Wow, when I read this, I thought of a lonely wanderer, far from home lost. There are quite a few metaphors in this poem, some of which I understood, others that will probably take time for me to understand. I cannot write like this, because what I write is usually head-on and straight-forward. This piece leaves one wondering. Very nice. :)

[Shy Girl]

I'm not versed at all the numbering words and teasing rhymes (sorry I'm not that good at all) But as I read this I started out thinking that you were lost, as you penned, then I felt as though I may have found solid ground, as you wrote, then I felt as though a curtain opened up and I gazed at the answer to my musings. (as was with your last line) I really could feel your writing. (if that makes sense) I'm sure that you were thinking more indepth as you wrote...but like I said I'm not that good a writing..but I'm learning as I go..so maybe some day :) This was a wonder :)

[Lily Mae]

"A realm through a portal I found,
Where once, dainties and devils dwelled appeased;
Only to return with a broken might
When a shattered fairytale besieged my sight."

I felt as though I could feel exactly how it would be to enter that portal.. You have penned these thoughts and emotions very well..x

[Manpreet]

Remarkable composition. For what I am impressed with is the flow of thoughts form words to sounds to vision... amazing work! An artistic journey of words, I just love your style!

[manifesto]

The sadness and desolation of being lost echoes through every word, and reading this poem, I feel like a wanderer. Your writing is beautiful!

[Enigma]

I guessed that a lot of effort went into this piece. But it was worth it; the end result is beautiful. Well crafted and succinct lines and vivid imagery. Great job!