Worlds Of Wanderers

Words are worlds of wanderers;

Waning wishes, his or hers.

Time is but an apprentice

Learning lessons- Silence through noise.

 

Through my ringing ears I hear  

The nocturnal heralds of hazy peril,

Then with my weary withered eyes,

I see the oceans drowning skies.

 

I sauntered the deserts of scorching sands

With club and cryptic cubes in hands;

Skewered and shuddered the green less land,

Espying for eons to end an errand.

 

A realm through a portal I found,

Where once, deities and devils dwelt appeased;

Only to return with a broken might

When a shattered fairytale besieged my sight.

 

                    

 

                                                                                                                                                                                                            FETUS~

                                       11/02/12

Reviews

[Shadows of Memories]

Amazing format. and amazing thought process. through every word u give a vivid picture of exactly whats happening... my best lines are :
"I sauntered the deserts of scorching sands
With club and cryptic cubes in hands;
Skewered and shuddered the green less land,
Espying for eons to end an errand."

its obviously a very interstng write announcing strength and depth in it. I love the metaphor of the traveller u used. It has enhanced the underlying meaning so beautifully. Just can say its one of the best pieces tht i have come across :) keep sharing nd thnks

[Coldfire]

a true masterpiece indeed

[Michael G. Smith]

This is truly a great poem. It took me upon a small journey itself. Thanks for sharing this.

[Writer]

I very much enjoyed this piece; very lovely.

[HeazerH]

I like the silence through noise verse. I like to mix things that at first glance may seem contradictory, and yet we know them to be true.

[Maya Garnes]

Wow! I really like this poem. Good job :)

[paddy d daly]

The imagery is so good, the third stanza, the green less land, you paint a picture so well.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Bashir... your poetry has such depth.
Life has beauty ... but the journey has
darkness as part of the bitter sweet
experience. It is our privilege to shine
our light. To express our feelings is a
flower in bloom. truly... Pat

[jasonguinn789]

First let me just say that this was a great poem. I don't know if you ever read Stephen King's "Dark Tower" series (which you should), but I could easily see this as an opening in one of those books. The last half was my favorite part when the narrator is parading around the desert and slipping through doorways to other worlds was fantastic. The images are impactful, word choice was excellent, and the floor and narration of the poem were all solid. Great job.

Have you published any of your work? Just curious, because if you haven't or haven't really tried, start with this poem. Yeah, it's that good.

[Stefanie Holmes]

This was stunning... loved the imagery! :)

~Stefanie

[PoemRodent]

I really enjoyed this write, good job and well thought out.

Robertt