Symbols of tyranny

Once upon a tribal time

When we dwelt on spoils and errors,

Transcendent from paroxysm of spite

A rector trounced and evaded,

Espied extended silhouettes

Through his tangerine eyes.

                              

“I create as I speak

Some unspoken legends;

Turn on the dark

For I will exhibit

A cosmos so bright that

Light will obliterate.”

 

“As you ponder in my thoughts

A serene depth of broken bonds,

You will perceive but not

That of which I forbid.”

 

“Doth inherit what ye shalt

 If it art what ye seek.”

 

The Fire and moon swirled in violet

Till an aura the stars discerned.

Motes of memories that lay moribund,

Purled and transmigrated in a maelstrom.

Few flashes of stupor

Of an epileptic fit elfish face

Buckled against the heart of waves.

 

A torrent of thoughts echoed

Through the ears of life,

To bare a bedlam of beatitude.

A violet volition of vain lust

Had subdued within forever.

 

“Such are dairies of teenage odyssey

(Symbols of tyranny)

They perish before they begin.

Such was mine and so will be yours

For we slumber in chaos- meekly.”

 

 

“Thy scorching swirls hast tasted fire

and shalt inherit what ye desire

If it art what ye seek.”

 

 

 

                                Fetus~

                                                                                           

Author's Note

What say folks?

Reviews

[roarke]

I think there is a difference between critique and criticism.

You've chosen a huge theme here, and how does one go about describing it? Do words suffice? Ah, but that is the eternal challenge.

should we find words or should we describe vision? Should we stay undefined or stake pitons along the way to hold our perception anchored?

We all make choices and who has the right answers? Try writing different drafts and see which one speaks what you want to say.

[wrote.here]

"A torrent of thoughts echoed

Through the ears of life,

To bare a bedlam of beatitude.

A violet volition of vain lust

Had subdued within forever."
- now tis stuck in my mind

[Brittany Zedalis]

Whew, this is remarkable.

[Penny]

Again, a very deep poem, the use of archaic expressions was a bold step to take but it worked. The poem has impact, more than anyrhing but the theme itself is very good. I salute to you.

[kublakhan27]

A phenomenal piece, epic in scope and spoken with grandeur...awesome work.

[Linda alexander]

“Thy scorching swirls hast tasted fire
and shalt inherit what ye desire
If it art what ye seek.”

Great write, as she ponder in thoughts, still being serene depth of broken bonds, it is a better outcome

[Elly_Green]

I liked this a lot. Very nicely done. As a Classical scholar, this took me back to readings of the Iliad, the Odyssey and the Aeneid. Not sure, exactly, what you were aiming for... but, that is the beauty of poetry, is it not? Everyone sees something different, personal to them. Once again, nicely done.

[Shaquana Adams]

This is so powerful. With such alliteration! I rarely see that on here. Thank you for sharing this poem!

[Katherine R.]

So much alliteration! XD

It really is a tough theme, but you captured it really well! It's saying something like, "You'll inherit the power you ant if it's really what you're looking for." I like it a lot and I think you got the theme down really well.

[Jayden Ireton]

This work is complex and pops off the page. Very great work.