"God I'm sorry I ate your apple"

an honest expression of grace

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I did it--it's my responsibility

absolve my children of a debacle

ensuing from their hidden agenda

Lead me on to the invisible star

Why why why does it even matter?

I flushed myself into this place

Honesty would have led elsewhere

& I avoided he whose path I took

steal me back into your embraces

& we'll carry her across deserts

on our exposed sun scorched back

as they see they accept our help

our one-ness no longer threatens

projecting the irony-based guilt

let their magic be in the closet

beaming out into its own essence

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Emily B]

I tell people this title stalked me when you first came to the cafe. And it did, I could no more hide from your honest expression of grace than i could stop breathing. I tell people when I introduce them to words like these that I've probably left a dozen reviews. I exaggerate a little sometimes. But I will get there eventually.

[Emily B]

God, I miss you

and words like these

but mostly you

R.I.P. John...

R.I.P. John...

[Emily B]

someone came along who reminds me very much of the honest conversations that used to find us, and so I came back to read this honest expression of grace, to remember where I've been, and maybe where I'm going

I hope all is well with you

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Poetry at its best.

[V.B.]

I love the shape of this poem. I have attempted to write poems comprised of equal-length lines in the past, and I know from experience that it is no picnic to stick to it and actually get anything said. You pulled it off admirably though, and for that, I commend you.

[Lilly Negoi]

i was curious to see the first poem you posted here - i'm always curious to see where people start from. and i found this text that forced my brain to use more than just one or two neurons in this monday morning. the general feeling that it conveyed fit very well the image you chose for this :). and it also made me think about the opposite mirrors effect - maybe because of the last two lines. there is a certain air of humbleness in this, but also a hidden pride in that "invisible star" that you mention. and regarding the title - are you sorry because "eating the apple" damned "you" to a less comfortable existence?! or is this just a supreme ironic way of uttering you aren't actually sorry? :)