The Gate

Fading shadows lighted the way

as I walked through the woods

and saw the leaves sway

like I never could.

No pain could weigh them down,

though the leaves were brown

on the verge of leaving

a wreath they were heaving

from the earth from which

the great tree rose,

the gate had always been open

and also very close.

Reviews

[Konigin]

I love it Devesh!!!!!! The imagery was spectacular! It made me envision Fall/Autumn. It made me think that the person in the poem was sad and I felt like maybe they lost something dear to them. Amazing job my dear Friend. Please, don't EVER stop writing. :))))))) ^,^

[Devesh]

You got me, wise lady of the Americas! :P You captured the meaning exactly like it was meant by me, thanks a lot for reading and reviewing! I promise I won't ever stop writing :)))

[Konigin]

HAHAHAHAHA!!!!!! :DDDDDDDDDDDDDD Of course I got you. :PPPPPPPPPPP And yays!!!! Do I get a prize????? You are welcome a lot! Good. I am holding you to that promise. When we are all old and still friends... I better still be reading your beautiful writing. :P ^,^

[Devesh]

Yep, one more packet of Poppins for you :P Hopefully, you will :))

[Konigin]

Hooorayy!!!!!! :P :DDDDDDD :)) Yeah. Hopefully I will.

[Addy]

Beautiful. I love how you described the leaves. Nice job.

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot, Addy :)

[Stefanie Holmes]

"Fading shadows lighted the way" Instead of using the word 'lighted' I think the word 'lit' would work better in this line. I think it reads smoother.

This was a beautiful poem Devesh! A very refreshing read. :)

~Stefanie

[Devesh]

I'll change it! Thank you, Stefanie :)

[Ayushi]

Truly wonderful poem... the various seasons depicts the roller coaster of our life.
beautifully written..

[Devesh]

Thanks! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a person walking towards the autumn of his life...noticing the gate open, waiting for him...

no more pain to endure...a kind ending.

[Devesh]

Always enjoy reading your reviews, Jacob! Thanks for reading :)

[Elina]

This is so lovely, Devesh! As always, I thoroughly enjoyed...you have such a wonderful way with words.

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot, Elina! :)

[Brook]

This is so beautiful Devesh. You've got some really amazing imagery going on! Great job, i always look forward to your writing.
- Brookly.

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot, Brookly! :))

[Vidya Bacchus]

You paint such vivid pictures with your words Devesh.Absolutely great poetry my friend :)

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot, Vidya! :))

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are so welcome:)

[Jackson H. Harley]

Great poem, wonderful imagery :) you continue to amaze me with your talent :)

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot, Jackson :))