The Man who carried a Cane

I looked down the sad

and drowsy city lane.

He saw my gaze approaching,

the man who carried a cane.

It was a snowy evening,

cold, even by the fireside.

A knock on the door,

and there he stood outside,

The man who carried a cane.

“Why, little lady!” he exclaimed,

“Won’t you let me in?

Don’t you remember me?

I’m your father’s kin!”

“Now, wait a moment!” I said,

“May I know your name?”

“Of course, sweet girl!,

My name is Pain.”

Reviews

[Shaquana Adams]

I did not see that ending coming. Nicely done! What a creative write!
-QuanaWana

[Devesh]

Thanks, Shaquana! :)

[MsJewel]

Your creativity shines in this wonderful little gem!

:) Julie

[Devesh]

Thank you :)

[Konigin]

ha! I like this Devesh! Nice and simple and cute! Your skilled rhyming made me grin and laugh! Well Done friend!!!!!! :D

[Devesh]

Thanks :))

[Konigin]

You're welcome! :))

[Raymond Federle]

Well rhymed. A fav to be sure!!!!! :)

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot, Raymond! :))

[Vidya Bacchus]

You amaze me with your writing Devesh.This is very wise and splendidly penned my friend :)

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot, Vidya! :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome Devesh:)

[Anita Singh]

Very wise. Very deep. Nothing much left to say. I sum up by saying: GREAT!

[Devesh]

Thank you :)

[Frieda P]

Oh my, this is devilishly good Devesh! Kudos teddy bear!!

[Devesh]

Cheers, William! :D

[Elina]

This was lovely Devesh! I really quite enjoyed it; I especially liked the story-like quality.

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading and for the lovely review, Elina! :)

[annabellee]

Wow, I really didn't expect the ending. Really great poem :)

[Devesh]

Thank you :))

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[Madalyn Beck]

A very unique story! Again, the imagery is stunning! Great work, Devesh! (:

[Devesh]

Thanks, Madalyn! :))