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Muffled sounds of feet

on a blanket of snow,

sounded like a whisper, 

a whisper in the know.

The rustling of the leaves sang

the song of a life leaving,

destined to go on

and leave behind the grieving.

A lament lovely and sweet

echoed through the wood, 

as the sun beat retreat

to where the light would..

Reviews

[Augustus]

Simplicity at its best. Nice, easy rhymes. The peaceful and pleasant setting provides the right background for the serious subject matter. You have painted a serene picture of Death. Noble and dignified. The imagery is again, simple but beautiful. My favourite lines were
"The rustling of the leaves sang
the song of a life leaving"
Keep writing! I think you have a very bright future. :)

[Devesh]

Thank you very much for rwading and for the lovely review, Augustus! :))

[Augustus]

You are most welcome

[Stefanie Holmes]

Beautifully, vivid images! Loved it Devesh!

~Stefanie

[maria ( rose)]

The imagery in this poem is simply beautiful..Well done;

[Devesh]

Thank you!

[maria ( rose)]

my pleasure!!

[Ren Grace]

Descriptions are key. This poem was lovely, it used all my senses my just reading the words.

[Devesh]

Thank you, Lauren! Good to see you back here :)

[Konigin]

Nature and the things it inspires... As always, superb! :D Good job Devesh! ^.^

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot, Chelsea! :D

[Konigin]

You are very welcome! ~.~

[Frieda P]

So bittersweet teddy bear, really tugs at the heartstrings, nicely pen'd my friend!

[Devesh]

Thank you, Frieda :)

[Frieda P]

Great work hon :) My pleasure.

[Erik Daniel]

A lovely poem Devesh. Well done!

[Devesh]

Thanks, Erik! :))

[Madalyn Beck]

This line touched me to the core: "the song of a life leaving". It can be read for different circumstances and it truly a sad yet beautiful line. The whole poem is stunning, Devesh. Beautiful, sad, yet still lovely in a way. Great work! (:

[Devesh]

Thank you for the lovely review, Madalyn. :))

[Vidya Bacchus]

Excellent poetry Devesh.Although rife with sadness :)

[Devesh]

Thank you :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)