What If

What if I should wake
before I fall asleep?
Would I see the light?
Or fall a little too deep?

Fade into the sky?
Or swim across the sea?
Just let everything go?
To be, just be.

I see your star shine
amidst all the screams
your light lights my sky,
a blanket of dreams.

Makes me think and wonder
Am I mine to keep?
Why is it that I
am afraid to fall asleep?

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the thoughts and questions in the poem. Sometime sleep lead us to the dark or the light. I did like the closing lines. To fear sleep and dreams would be a bad place to be. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading :))

[Kai Rollins]

Man...I have to learn from you. That flow is golden. Smooth as silk. Every time. I love it man. And fantastic write on a concept as old as this :3

[Devesh]

Thank you :)

[Jeffery Hayes]

Truly amazing! Keep up the amazing writing

[Devesh]

Thank you, Jeffrey :)

[Jeffery Hayes]

Your welcome :)

[Savanna]

It flows so easily, i really like your work. Keep writing :)

[Devesh]

Thank you :)

[Savanna]

:) Welcome

[Amanda Rae]

That is beautiful. You had a rhyme scheme there that added to the poem rather than being a distraction. I loved it. Simple yet I get feelings from it.

[Devesh]

Glad you liked it Amanda, thanks for reading :)

[LifeInPoetry]

This is a wonderfully creation.

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading :)

[Johanna]

Wow.. it was beautiful.. loved the end.. such flow and great magic about it.. I love your writing! keep it up

[Devesh]

Glad you liked it! Thank you for reading, Johanna :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, about that "am i mine to keep?"

i like that..."and i have miles to go before i sleep and miles to go before i sleep"

and yet what about the promises? i guess only the ones that we make to ourselves...and we need to light our own sky...then we can share that light with another.

really like this...

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading Jacob. Your insight is much appreciated, as always :)

[Elina]

Another marvelous poem... This is beautifully written; the rhyme doesn't seem forced, but rather flows quite naturally. Lovely job!

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading, Elina :)

[Brook]

I love this.
Beautifully written. Great job once again, Devesh.

[Devesh]

Glad you liked it! Thanks for reading, Brookly :)

[Brook]

You're very welcome :)

[Jackson H. Harley]

Wonderful poem :) great imagery and word choice, you are very talented :) look forward to reading more :)

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot, Jackson :)