What If

What if I should wake
before I fall asleep?
Would I see the light?
Or fall a little too deep?

Fade into the sky?
Or swim across the sea?
Just let everything go?
To be, just be.

I see your star shine
amidst all the screams
your light lights my sky,
a blanket of dreams.

Makes me think and wonder
Am I mine to keep?
Why is it that I
am afraid to fall asleep?

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the thoughts and questions in the poem. Sometime sleep lead us to the dark or the light. I did like the closing lines. To fear sleep and dreams would be a bad place to be. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading :))

[Aayushi]

Nice poem...simple words but deep thought.... nice work...All the best.

[Devesh]

Thank you for stopping by :))

[New Theory]

The poem of an insomniac, very well written.

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading :)

[New Theory]

You are welcome :)

[Muchypuu]

Another wonderful work ! Super poetry

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot for stopping by :)

[Muchypuu]

You're welcome

[Blue]

"Makes me think and wonder
Am I mine to keep?
Why is it that I
am afraid to fall asleep?"

You're getting more philosophical, Devesh. I need your poetry to wise me up. ;) But seriously, I adore this poem. Simply, unpretentiously, and brilliantly worded. I missed reading you. Sorry, I had a time off.

[Devesh]

Hehe :P No worries, Arzel, I understand, I've been taking time off myself, so haven't read much as well. Also, my new stuff is in German, so I can't post it here :P Thank you very much for reading :))

[Blue]

Ahh, stun me with Chinese, French, Dutch, and Spanish in the future, okay? :)

You are welcome.

[Devesh]

I will, as soon as I get around to learning them. :)

[Christina Carpenter]

Wow I really enjoyed it. I liked the way it flowed. I was a little confused on the meaning but I think I got the gist of it :)

[Devesh]

Glad you enjoyed it! :)

[Stefanie Holmes]

A write that made me think for sure... Good one Devesh!

~Stefanie

[Shaquana Adams]

Makes me think and wonder
Am I mine to keep?

A very thought provoking poem. The questions span far further than the actual questions you ask. Great write :)

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading, Shaquana :)

[annabellee]

Love it. A thought-provoking and intriguing write.
Well done :)

[Devesh]

Thank you :)

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[Ren Grace]

I love the questions you pose and how it made me think. Awesome job :)

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading, Lauren :)