Ghost of Elder

Woven around my soul

like gossamer, a silken thread,

a ghost, he swallows me whole

and fills me with dread.

He lives in a tree of elder

rooted in my heart,

hides in a pool and welters

in the darkest of the art.

Whispers through my being,

like a shadow through the night.

Lingers without seeing,

the light's lithe might.

Reviews

[Desert Rain]

May I just say- WOW, Devesh. I don't write poetry, and I'm not normally one for reading it either. But this was simply stunning! The rhymes are perfect, the flow is smooth, and the message powerful. Granted, it could just be pregnancy hormones- but I do believe I even nearly teared at "He lives in a tree of elder, rooted in my heart.."
Fantastic!
100/100

[Devesh]

This made me smile! Thank you very very much! :))

[Blue]

You are such an intellectual person, Devesh.

[Devesh]

What's intellectual about this? o.O Thanks anyways :) :P

[Blue]

Come on. Haha.

[Tina Louise UK]

Excellent piece, really enjoyed :) x

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot, Tia! :)

[Reginald Van Langenhove]

Reads like a dream, Devesh!

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot, Reginald! :)

[Sami Khalil]

I like your style man. I still have to figure it out...Bravo.............

[Devesh]

Thank you. =) You're not alone....sometimes I feel as if I don't understand what I'm writing :)

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha...You are most welcome. That was a compliment by the way...:)............

[Devesh]

No worries, I understand what you're saying :)

[Sami Khalil]

:)....................

[HayleyLemore]

I thoroughly enjoy your writing and hope to read more. The words are so sharp and smartly written. I would like to see a longer poem too. Perhaps?

[Devesh]

Thanks for stopping by, Hayley, glad you like my writing! :) I don't know why I can't write longer pieces but I just can't seem to keep going. This is the longest I have written, I think:

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/insolitude/1317298/

It's definitely not my best work but I enjoyed writing it. Hope you like it! :)

[KAOlmsted]

This is beautiful...thanks so much for sharing it with us.

[Devesh]

Glad you liked it..thanks for stopping by :)

[KAOlmsted]

My absolute pleasure...

[Frieda P]

Another beautifully pen'd tribute, it's achingly haunting Devesh, tugs at the heart stings.

[Devesh]

Why thank you, William! :)

[Frieda P]

Always my pleasure silly boy ;-P x

[DIVYA]

Wow! Let the ghost inspire you, darkly.... Liked it a lot Devesh.

[Devesh]

I'm glad you did, thanks for reading! :)

[❤ Maggie ❤..]

Great job! :) This was really well-written.

[Devesh]

Thanks Maggie, glad you liked it! :)