The Kissing Gate

You stand on the threshold

and stare, goodbye etched;

on your face, lines that hold

the workings of fate wretched.

Are we the darkness between

two brightly burning flames?

Or just puny pawns

in destiny's childish games?

The wonderless wonder

of dreams torn asunder?

or just another life

that forever went under?

Either way it's time,

today is the date.

Carry on & forth

beyond the kissing gate.

Reviews

[Lloyd Frieson-Small]

Beautiful mastery within this work, you are on your way to the level of unrestrained genius. I see that you cling to the rhyming genre, and while your work is impeccable, you will eventually break away from this genre and immortalize your art form in a genre of your own. Bravo, and continue your journey of mastery..

[Devesh]

Unrestrained genius? :P I'm flattered :D Thanks a lot! :)

[Marina]

this piece is absolutely striking, and will really stick with me like a memory. it reminds me of a painful goodbye. thank you for sharing :)

[Devesh]

It really is about a painful goodbye..you're most welcome :)

[Kai Rollins]

.......stop the madness. That was amazing *_* legendary. Just. Ahhhhh. So good. I'm glad I read this

[Devesh]

The madness never stops. :P You flatter me, Kai. Thanks for reading! =)

[Sami Khalil]

The title, the poem, the sentiments are all wonderful...Pen on...:).......

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading! :)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:).......................

[Susie]

I love this. Well done : D

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot, Susie! :)

[SaraJayne96]

You have somehow weaved a beautiful picture turned into a memory; the faint feeling of a pair of lips upon mine; and, the fleeting moment of love between two people. Amazing job Devesh :)

[Devesh]

I'm glad you enjoyed it, Sara. Thank you for reading :)

[SaraJayne96]

You're welcome Devesh :) I can't wait to read more of your work!

[Brook]

This is very beautiful.
I love the language you've used, and it flows really well. Great job :)

[Devesh]

Thanks for stopping by, Brookly, glad you enjoyed it! :)

[Deswy2Knives]

Beautifully done, Devesh.

[Devesh]

Thank you! :)

[❤ Maggie ❤..]

Awesome job with this one! :)

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot, Maggie! :)

[redflutterby]

Lovely words Devesh and much to consider. Really enjoyed this one!

[Devesh]

I'm glad you did! Thanks for reading, Red and for sparing me the whip lol. :P

[redflutterby]

Lmao....you are very welcome!!

[KWP]

Hey I like your style here ... nice!

[Devesh]

Thank you for taking the time to read =)